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You have received a letter from your bank, asking you to acknowledge receipt of a new bank card. However, the card was missing from the envelope. v.2

You have received a letter from your bank, asking you to acknowledge receipt of a new bank card. However, the card was missing from the envelope. v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inform you that I have recently received a letter from your bank, and an envelop which was supposed to contain my new bank card. Unfortunately, no card was enclosed in the envelope when I opened it. I am hoping that you would issue me another card and hold the delivered one to stop any misuse. I have been maintaining a savings bank account with your Deportaire branch since 2018 and my account number is SA25874210. Immediately after the occurrence, I telephoned the bank to explain the problem, but I could not get through to the right department, even though I waited on the line for over half an hour, which was extremely annoying. In the letter, you asked me to acknowledge the receipt of the card, but obviously, I cannot do this as I have not received it. I am now worried because the lost card might cause trouble. What if the card is misused? Will the bank be responsible for that? You should cancel or hold this card so no one else can use it. Please also send me a new card by secure means. I hope to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully, Beck Turner
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inform you that I have recently received a letter from your
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bank
, and an
Did you mean the noun "envelope"?
envelop
which
was supposed
to contain my new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bank
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
. Unfortunately, no
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
was enclosed
in the envelope when I opened it. I am hoping that you would issue me another
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
and hold the delivered one to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
any misuse.

I have been maintaining a savings
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bank
account with your
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Deportaire
branch since 2018 and my account number is SA25874210. Immediately after the occurrence, I telephoned the
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bank
to
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explain
the problem,
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but
I could not
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get
through to the right department,
even though
I waited on the line for over half an hour, which was
extremely
annoying.

In the letter, you asked me to acknowledge the receipt of the
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card
,
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but
obviously
, I cannot do this as I have not received it. I am
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now
worried
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because
the lost
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
might cause trouble. What if the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
is misused
? Will the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bank
be responsible for that?

You should cancel or hold this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
no one else can
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use
it.
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Please
also
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send
me a new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
by secure means.

I hope to hear from you
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soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Beck Turner
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have received a letter from your bank, asking you to acknowledge receipt of a new bank card. However, the card was missing from the envelope. v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
204 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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