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There are some problems in the changing room in your sport center Write a letter to the sport center manager In your letter you should describe the problems in the changing room explain why the sport center is important for you suggest what the manager sh v.2

There are some problems in the changing room in your sport center Write a letter to the sport center manager In your letter you should describe the problems in the changing room explain why the sport center is important for you suggest what the manager sh v. 2
Dir Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to suggest that your sport center should be repaired something in the changing room. I always go to your sport center every days. I do yoga and run on the machine, which make me stronger. Moreover I am not only do exercise but also listen music and eat some meals there, that makes me feel relaxed, comfortable, and do wonder for my health and people. However, I am really sad, because your changing room is very dirty, I think it is not be clean for long time. especially, because water cannot exit then it over on the floor, the room very unclean, that makes people uncomfortable. I recommend that the manager should be repair all of them and make clean every three hours, which make the changing will be clean and comfortable for everyone. I thank you for your consideration and I hope your sport center will more develop in the future. Yours faithfully, Loc
Dir Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to suggest that your sport center should
be repaired
something in the changing room.

I always go to your sport center every
The noun should be probably in the singular form: "day"?
days
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
do yoga and run on the machine, which
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
me stronger.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Moreover
I am not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
do exercise
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
listen music and eat
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
meals there, that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
makes
me feel relaxed, comfortable, and do wonder for my health and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.

However
, I am
really
sad,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
Did you mean "you're" or "you are"?
your
changing room is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
dirty, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
it is not
Consider using a past participle here: "been".
be
clean for long time.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
especially
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
water cannot exit then it over on the floor, the room
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
unclean, that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
makes
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
uncomfortable.

I recommend that the manager should be
Did you mean "repaired"?
repair
all of them and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
clean every three hours, which
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
the changing will be clean and comfortable for everyone.

I thank you for your consideration and I hope your sport center will more develop in the future.

Yours
faithfully
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Loc
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS letter There are some problems in the changing room in your sport center Write a letter to the sport center manager In your letter you should describe the problems in the changing room explain why the sport center is important for you suggest what the manager sh v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
163 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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