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You have heard that your company is organising a language training abroad for a limitednumber of participants. Write a letter of interest: -- state your position in your company- explain why they should include you in the training- explain how your trainin v.2

You have heard that your company is organising a language training abroad for a limitednumber of participants. Write a letter of interest: -- state your position in your company- explain why they should include you in the training- explain how your trainin v. 2
Dear sir, I am writing to show my interest for the overseas language training programme which a limited people are required to apply. I work as the procurement officer in the company pharmaceutical department where I am responsible for stock management and inventory control. Let me explain my situation in detail. I should be included in the training to improve my communication skills and further broaden my horizon in the cultural heritage of the spanish people. The training will be beneficial to me and the company in a number of ways. Firstly, it will improve the communication skills because most of our client are Spanish nationals thus such avenue will enhance our trade relationship. Consequently, this will boost sales and increase the company revenue because the training will improve company' s reputation and participants will learn the cultural differences which will further increase their relationship with their clients. Thanks for your considerations. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Xyz. Ibl
Dear sir,

I am writing to
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I work as the procurement officer in the
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pharmaceutical department where I am responsible for stock management and inventory control.

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me
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explain
my situation in detail. I should
be included
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training
to
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improve
my communication
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skills
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further
broaden my horizon in the cultural heritage of the
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spanish
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The
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training
will be beneficial to me and the
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company
in a number of ways.
Firstly
, it will
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improve
the communication
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skills
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because
most of our client are Spanish nationals
thus
such avenue will enhance our trade relationship.
Consequently
, this will boost sales and increase the
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company
revenue
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because
the
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training
will
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improve
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#039; s reputation and participants will learn the cultural differences which will
further
increase their relationship with their clients.

Thanks for your considerations. I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

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IELTS letter You have heard that your company is organising a language training abroad for a limitednumber of participants. Write a letter of interest: -- state your position in your company- explain why they should include you in the training- explain how your trainin v. 2

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  American English
8 paragraphs
162 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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