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You would like to work overseas, write a letter to an employment agency. Write: -- what job you would like to apply- what companies are you looking for- why do you want to work overseas v.2

You would like to work overseas, write a letter to an employment agency. Write: -- what job you would like to apply- what companies are you looking for- why do you want to work overseas v. 2
Dear sir, I am writing with reference to the international jobs advertised on your agency website on 26th April 2019. My credentials matched the advertised job of pharmacist assistant and I want to apply for it. I am enclosing my cv for this job Let me explain my situation in detail, I want to apply for pharmacist assistant. I have a 3 year working experience in the field and I have a masters degree in business administration. I believe with these I am qualified for the position. I want to work for a multinational pharmaceutical production company because of my vast knowledge and experience in that field. In addition, i did training in supply chain management which i know will be beneficial in that line of work. There are a plethora of reasons why i will be delighted to work abroad. Firstly, better renumerations, pharmacist assistants are well paid overseas. Secondly; political stability, countries like Newzealand and Australia are politically stable which makes their fiscal policies quite stable and efficient. lastly, my families stay overseas so i will love to relocate and be with them. Thanks for your consideration, i look forward to hearing from you. Yours Faithfully, Ibekwe Primus.
Dear sir,

I am writing with reference to the international jobs advertised on your agency website on 26th April 2019. My credentials matched the advertised job of pharmacist assistant and I want to apply for it. I am enclosing my
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cv
for this
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job


This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Let
me
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explain
my situation in detail, I want to apply for pharmacist assistant. I have a
When a number forms part of an adjectival compound, use a hyphen: "3-year"
3 year
working experience in the field and I have a
For an academic degree, use "master’s".
masters
degree in business administration. I believe with these I
am qualified
for the position.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
want to work for a multinational pharmaceutical production
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company
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because
of my vast knowledge and experience in that field.
In addition
,
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
did training in supply chain management which
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
know will be beneficial in that line of work.

There are a plethora of reasons why
Did you mean "I"?
i
will
be delighted
to work abroad.
Firstly
, better
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renumerations
, pharmacist assistants are well paid overseas.
Secondly
; political stability, countries like
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Newzealand
and Australia are
politically
stable which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
their fiscal policies quite stable and efficient.
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lastly
, my families stay overseas
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so
Did you mean "I"?
i
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to relocate and be with them.

Thanks for your consideration,
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
Faithfully
,

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Ibekwe
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Primus
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Mistakes
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IELTS letter You would like to work overseas, write a letter to an employment agency. Write: -- what job you would like to apply- what companies are you looking for- why do you want to work overseas v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
200 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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