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You have heard and develop plans to build a shopping center near your house, write a letter to conceal, say how you heard about the plan, explain how you feel about it, ask for more information about it. v.2

You have heard and develop plans to build a shopping center near your house, write a letter to conceal, say how you heard about the plan, explain how you feel about it, ask for more information about it. v. 2
Dear sir madam, I am habitant in Azimiyeh, who has lived in the region for years. While purchasing some things at the market near my house, I heard about your plan to construct a Mall in this area. However, the person who told the news, did not know the details of the programme about which we were curious. Hearing the news not only was surprising for me, but also made me so glad and considerably enthusiastic to do shopping in the mall. Since I am keen on going shopping and buying goods including colourful gifts, clothes, and stationery, benefiting search Bazaar near my residence is so interesting and exciting for me. I cannot explain how much delighting the fore mentioned news was for me. It is not clarified for me whether where the construction will be settled down or how much big it will be. I would appreciate it if I could know about the size, how many floors there will be, and what kind of stores will be located. I really would like to know about the mall and diversity of the goods I can buy there. I look forward for more information you will let me benefit from. I am absolutely grateful for your exact and quick answer, which will be get soon. Faithfully yours, Zeinab Khalaj.
Dear sir madam,

I am habitant in
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Azimiyeh
, who has
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lived
in the region for years. While purchasing
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some
things at the market near my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
, I heard about your plan to construct a Mall in this area.
However
, the person who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
the news, did not know the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
of the
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programme
about which we were curious.

Hearing the news not
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only
was surprising for me,
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but
also
made me
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so
glad and
considerably
enthusiastic to
The usual collocation for an activity ending in "-ing" is "go" not "do" or "play." Revise: "go shopping".
do shopping
in the mall. Since I am keen
Did you mean "ongoing"?
on going
shopping and buying
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goods
including
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colourful
gifts, clothes, and stationery, benefiting search Bazaar near my residence is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
interesting and exciting for me. I cannot
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
how much delighting the fore mentioned news was for me.

It is not clarified for me whether where the construction will
be settled
down or how much
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
it will be. I would appreciate it if I could know about the size, how
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
floors there will be, and what kind of stores will
be located
. I
really
would like to know about the mall and diversity of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
there.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
look forward for more information you will
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let
me benefit from.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am
absolutely
grateful for your exact and quick answer, which will be
Consider using a past participle here: "got", "gotten".
get
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Faithfully
yours,

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Zeinab
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Khalaj
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have heard and develop plans to build a shopping center near your house, write a letter to conceal, say how you heard about the plan, explain how you feel about it, ask for more information about it. v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
219 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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