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There is a public park near where you live You have heard that local council wants to sell this park Write a letter to a local newspaper in your letter Introduce yourself Describe the importance of this park Say what action you will take if the council co v.1

There is a public park near where you live You have heard that local council wants to sell this park Write a letter to a local newspaper in your letter Introduce yourself Describe the importance of this park Say what action you will take if the council co v. 1
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this letter to request you to revise your decision of selling the common park of bank colony. My name is Vikas, and I have been a resident of the bank colony since last seven years. I am extremely satisfied with the work that has been done by you so far for the development of our society. However, I and other residents are little disappointed to know that local government has decided to sale this park to a businessman for the construction of a mall. This park holds a lot of importance in our day to day life as it serves the best place for the people of your locality to socialize themselves. In addition to this, a group of people visit this park every morning to carry out their meditation and exercise routines. Further, parents feel this park to be the safest place for the children to play in the evening. Hence, closing this park will disturb the daily routines of people. I would like to mention that if the decision of selling the park is not reversed, I along with other residents have to highlight this case into media to draw the attention of our state government. Looking forward for your cooperation in this matter. Yours faithfully, Vikas sharma
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to request you to revise your decision of selling the common
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
of bank colony.

My name is Vikas, and I have been a resident of the bank colony since last seven years. I am
extremely
satisfied with the work that has
been done
by you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
far for the development of our society.
However
, I and other residents are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
disappointed to know that local
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
has decided to sale this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
to a businessman for the construction of a mall.

This
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
holds
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
importance in our
It appears that two hyphens are missing.
day to day
life as it serves the best place for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
of your locality to socialize themselves.
In addition
to this, a group of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
visit this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
every morning to carry out their meditation and exercise routines.
Further
, parents feel this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
to be the safest place for the children to play in the evening.
Hence
, closing this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
will disturb the daily routines of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.

I would like to mention that if the decision of selling the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
is not reversed, I along with other residents
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
highlight this case into media to draw the attention of our state
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
.

Looking forward for your cooperation in this matter.

Yours
faithfully
,

Vikas
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sharma
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter There is a public park near where you live You have heard that local council wants to sell this park Write a letter to a local newspaper in your letter Introduce yourself Describe the importance of this park Say what action you will take if the council co v. 1

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
214 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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