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Writing task 1 (a letter)Write a letter to your friend who lives in a different country about your plan to work overseas. In your letter say– What jobs do you plan to do? – Why do you want to work overseas? – Ask for some information related to jobs, v.1

Writing task 1 (a letter)Write a letter to your friend who lives in a different country about your plan to work overseas. In your letter say– What jobs do you plan to do? – Why do you want to work overseas? – Ask for some information related to jobs, v. 1
Dear Bro How are you? Hope you enjoy your life with Aussies. I am in the cloud nine as got a high score in the language test and planning to fly to join with you all. Actually, it' s my long cherished dream to get a well paid job in country like Australia. As I am a techno-savvy, I can handle any work in offices and hope to get a good job as technical assistant. As you know, I have got good experience as special educator, language trainer and a student counselor. So I hope I will not struggle to hunt job overseas. Many of my friends encouraged me from migration as we miss our quality time with family, although I have to take this as challenge since I haven' t got a own even after five years of my marital life. Even many of family members and other acquaintance either blame me or promote me to find a job which will meet my urgent needs at least for short term period. So I decided to spare up to five years on migration. Anyway, it is you who has got chance to work in Australia from our fried circle and I guess you might know about the job opportunities there. Please share me about different options which are applicable for my qualifications and skills. Please tell me about the payments and how long we have to work in a day and week. Hope we will find a good time together there sooner. Lovely Smith
Dear Bro

How are you? Hope you enjoy your life with Aussies. I am in the cloud nine as
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a high score in the language
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and planning to
fly
to
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join
with you all.

Actually,
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get
a well paid
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job
in country like Australia. As I am a techno-savvy, I can handle any work in offices and hope to
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get
a
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good
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job
as technical assistant. As you know, I have
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got
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good
experience as special educator, language trainer and a student counselor.
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So
I hope I will not struggle to hunt
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job
overseas.

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Many
of my friends encouraged me from migration as we miss our quality time with family, although I
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have to
take this as challenge since I
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got
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even after five years of my
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life. Even
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many
of family members and other acquaintance either blame me or promote me to find a
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job
which will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
my urgent needs at least for short term period.
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So
I decided to spare up to five years on migration.

Anyway, it is you who has
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got
chance to work in Australia from our fried circle and I guess you might know about the
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job
opportunities there.
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Please
share me about
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different
options which are applicable for my qualifications and
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skills
.
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Please
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tell
me about the payments and how long we
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have to
work in a day and week.

Hope we will find a
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good
time together there sooner.

Lovely

Smith
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter Writing task 1 (a letter)Write a letter to your friend who lives in a different country about your plan to work overseas. In your letter say– What jobs do you plan to do? – Why do you want to work overseas? – Ask for some information related to jobs, v. 1

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
253 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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