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You have recently visited a museum. Now write a letter to your friend about the museum you have visited. Write a letter to him/ her. In your letter, write: - where you went - what you saw there - how you felt about it v.8

You have recently visited a museum. Now write a letter to your friend about the museum you have visited. Write a letter to him/ her. In your letter, write: - where you went - what you saw there - how you felt about it v. 8
Dear Sam, Hello, I am Cindy. I hope this letter finds you well. These days, I visited animal taxidermy museum, that museum was very interested. If we visited together, it would be fun and would make excited memory to us. As you know, I love to see various animals because, I can feel I was explored in the jungle. And there was living in the tree, water and land animals, especially, the crocodile was really huge also, there has specific specious kind of animals too. That museum located in downtown Vancouver, it takes 30minuate from my home. I think you will visit Vancouver 2 weeks later, right? It cost is pretty cheap! It is just 10dollers per person. Most of the staff was staying the entrance, they gather people and give the tickets. Inside the museum was quiet and clean, most of the customers were visitors and local people. Furthermore, I know a delicious cuisine restaurant near the museum. I wish you love that restaurant too. I hope to see you soon. Your sincerely, Cindy.
Dear Sam,

Hello, I am Cindy. I hope this letter finds you well. These days, I visited
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taxidermy
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museum
, that
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museum
was
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very
interested. If we visited together, it would be fun and would
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make
excited memory to us.

As you know, I
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love
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see
various
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animals
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because
, I can feel I
was explored
in the jungle. And there was living in the tree, water and land
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animals
,
especially
, the crocodile was
really
huge
also
, there has specific specious kind of
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animals
too. That
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museum
located in downtown Vancouver, it takes 30minuate from my home. I
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think
you will visit Vancouver 2 weeks later, right?
It seems that the possessive pronoun "its" fits better in this context. Please verify.
It
cost is pretty
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cheap
! It is
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just
10dollers per person. Most of the staff was staying the entrance, they gather
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people
and give the tickets. Inside the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museum
was quiet and clean, most of the customers were visitors and local
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.
Furthermore
, I know a delicious cuisine restaurant near the
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museum
. I wish you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
that restaurant too.

I hope to
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see
you
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soon
.

Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
Your
sincerely
,

Cindy.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter You have recently visited a museum. Now write a letter to your friend about the museum you have visited. Write a letter to him/ her. In your letter, write: - where you went - what you saw there - how you felt about it v. 8

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
175 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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