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You have had a bank account for a few years. Recently you received a letter from the bank stating that your account is $240 overdrawn and that you will be charged $70 which will be taken directly from your account. You know that this information is incorrect. v. 5

Dear Sir  or Madam, I am writing this letter to notify you of a mistake in my transaction record which was forwarded to me yesterday from the bank. Perhaps the mistake was made by one of your employees and I am hoping you would rectify it. The letter that I received outlined that I overdrew $240 last month and that is why I will be charged $70 which would be deducted directly from my account. I really am very worried about this because I have not overdrawn any amount from my bank account during the last six months. I visited your bank on 25th March to deposit $500 and I withdrew $240 a week later. There is a possibility that my $500 deposit was not correctly entered in your accounting tally book. I am attaching my deposit slip of $500 with this letter. I request you to correct this error and do not charge me any penalty. Such an error in a customer's account is not expected from a reputed bank like yours. Therefore, I also suggest you scrutinise the transaction history of a customer before sending him a letter. Thank you for giving the matter your attention Yours faithfully, Sudip Pant

IELTS letter You have had a bank account for a few years. Recently you received a letter from the bank stating that your account is $240 overdrawn and that you will be charged $70 which will be taken directly from your account. You know that this information is incorrect. v.5

Dear Sir
 
or Madam, I am writing this letter to notify you of a mistake in my transaction record which
was forwarded
to me yesterday from the
bank
. Perhaps the mistake
was made
by one of your
employees and
I am hoping you would rectify it. The letter that I received outlined that I overdrew $240 last month and
that is
why I will
be charged
$70 which would
be deducted
directly
from my account. I
really
am
very
worried about this
because
I have not overdrawn any amount from my
bank
account during the last six months. I visited your
bank
on 25th March to deposit $500 and I withdrew $240 a week later. There is a possibility that my $500 deposit was not
correctly
entered in your accounting tally book. I am attaching my deposit slip of $500 with this letter. I request you to correct this error and do not charge me any penalty. Such an error in a customer's account is not
expected
from a reputed
bank
like yours.
Therefore
, I
also
suggest you
scrutinise
the transaction history of a customer
before
sending him a letter. Thank you for giving the matter your attention Yours
faithfully
,
Sudip
Pant
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
Letter
7 paragraphs
201 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resources: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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