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You travelled by plane last week and your suitcase was lost. You have still heard nothing from the airline company. v.3

You travelled by plane last week and your suitcase was lost. You have still heard nothing from the airline company. v. 3
Dear Sir or Madam, I took a flight from Kuala Lumpur to Melbourne on 16th March on the Royal Dutch Airlines and lost my suitcase. I am writing to get an update regarding this and hoping you would help me locate the lost luggage. My flight number was MH 1685 and the seat number was 12B. The plane departed the Kuala Lumpur International Airport at 9. 30 pm and after I arrived at Melbourne Airport, I noticed that my suitcase was lost. I could not recover it after searching for more than two hours. Although I have explained this to Mr Johnson, who was in charge of the luggage claim office and promised to give me a call within the next 24 hours, I am yet to receive an update. My luggage claim number is 00269 and I am attaching a copy of it. The suitcase that I lost is a dark brown leather suitcase with a black handle. It contains some clothes, souvenirs for friends, a couple of magazines, a novel and a business proposal which I need for a presentation I am going to conduct on 30th March. I would really appreciate if you could look into the matter and update me on the whereabouts of the suitcase. I really need this urgently and can pick it up from your office once you confirm its possession. Thank you for giving the matter your attention and I hope to hear your reply soon. Yours Faithfully, Andrew Harris
Dear Sir or Madam,

I took a flight from Kuala Lumpur to Melbourne on 16th March on the Royal Dutch Airlines and
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lost
my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suitcase
. I am writing to
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get
an update regarding this and hoping you would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me locate the
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lost
luggage.

My flight number was MH 1685 and the seat number was 12B. The
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plane
departed the Kuala Lumpur International Airport at 9. 30 pm and after I arrived at Melbourne Airport, I noticed that my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suitcase
was
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lost
. I could not recover it after searching for more than two hours. Although I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explained
this to Mr Johnson, who was in charge of the luggage claim office and promised to give me a call within the
next
24 hours, I am
yet
to receive an update. My luggage claim number is
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00269 and
I am attaching a copy of it.

The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suitcase
that I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lost
is a dark brown leather
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suitcase
with a black handle. It contains
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some
clothes, souvenirs for friends, a couple of magazines, a novel and a business proposal which I need for a presentation I am going to conduct on 30th March.

I would
really
appreciate if you could look into the matter and update me on the whereabouts of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suitcase
. I
really
need this
urgently
and can pick it up from your office once you confirm its possession.

Thank you for giving the matter your attention and I hope to hear your reply
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
Faithfully
,

Andrew Harris
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS letter You travelled by plane last week and your suitcase was lost. You have still heard nothing from the airline company. v. 3

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
247 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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