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You travelled by plane last week and your suitcase was lost. You have still heard nothing from the airline company. v.6

You travelled by plane last week and your suitcase was lost. You have still heard nothing from the airline company. v. 6
Dear Sir or Madam, I am a frequent flyer of your airlines - The Continental, and recently took a flight from New York to London in which I forgot my suitcase. I am writing to inquire about the suitcase and hoping you would arrange to find it and then allow me to pick it up from your office. I took the flight on 15th January and the flight number was AB220. While off-boarding at the London City Airport, I forgot to collect it from the overhead bin over my sear. I realised the mistake after I got out of the airport. So, I raised a request with your staff to recover the suitcase. After all the formalities and paperwork, an officer informed me that someone would contact me within 24 hours. Five days have already elapsed since then and I have not heard any news of my suitcase. For your kind information, it a grey leather suitcase made by TravelPro and has a logo on the front that resembles a white swan. The bag also bears my name tag on it. It is a medium-size suitcase that contains a few clothing items, a notebook, a travel charger and some important papers. I am hoping you would investigate the location of the suitcase and keep it in your possession temporarily. I would be ready to collect it from your office once I hear from you regarding this. Thank you for giving the matter your attention and I hope to hear your reply soon. Yours sincerely, Ramanuj Roy
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a frequent flyer of your airlines
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
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The Continental, and recently took a flight from New York to London in which I forgot my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suitcase
. I am writing to inquire about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suitcase
and hoping you would arrange to find it and then
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
me to pick it up from your office.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
took the flight on 15th January and the flight number was AB220. While off-boarding at the London City Airport, I forgot to collect it from the overhead bin over my sear. I
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realised
the mistake after I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
out of the airport.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, I raised a request with your staff to recover the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suitcase
.
After all
the formalities and paperwork, an officer informed me that someone would contact me within 24 hours. Five days have already elapsed since then and I have not heard any news of my suitcase.

For your kind information,
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it
a
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grey
leather
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suitcase
made by
Possible spelling mistake found.
TravelPro
and has a logo on the front that resembles a white swan. The bag
also
bears my name tag on it. It is a medium-size
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suitcase
that contains a few clothing items, a notebook, a travel charger and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
papers.

I am hoping you would investigate the location of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suitcase
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
it in your possession
temporarily
. I would be ready to collect it from your office once I hear from you regarding this.

Thank you for giving the matter your attention and I hope to hear your reply
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
sincerely
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Ramanuj
Roy
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS letter You travelled by plane last week and your suitcase was lost. You have still heard nothing from the airline company. v. 6

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
255 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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