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You travelled by plane last week and your suitcase was lost. You have still heard nothing from the airline company. v.5

You travelled by plane last week and your suitcase was lost. You have still heard nothing from the airline company. v. 5
Dear Sir or Madam, I took a flight from the Narita International Airport, Tokyo to the Heathrow Airport, London on 14th November with your airlines. Unfortunately, my suitcase did not come out after the flight. Although I have explained this to the in-charge officer at the Luggage Claim Office at the Heathrow Airport, I have not heard anything from them. My suitcase is a blue Samsonite and was approximately 12 X 98 centimetre in diameter. One side of it has some small scratches and a heart-shaped sticker was placed on the other side. My initials "PB" are also written on both sides. The suitcase contains a few books, clothes and a copy of my thesis, which I need for a conference on 27th November. So I would highly appreciate if you could give me a prompt reply at your earliest convenience. My flight number was NF 1452, and my Luggage Claim Number is 02547. Yours faithfully, Paul Burrell
Dear Sir or Madam,

I took a flight from the
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Narita
International Airport, Tokyo to the Heathrow Airport, London on 14th November with your airlines. Unfortunately, my suitcase did not
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come
out after the flight. Although I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explained
this to the in-charge officer at the Luggage Claim Office at the Heathrow Airport, I have not heard anything from them.

My suitcase is a blue Samsonite and was approximately 12
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X
98
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centimetre
in diameter. One side of it has
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some
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small
scratches and a heart-shaped sticker
was placed
on the other side. My initials
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"
PB
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"
are
also
written on both sides.

The suitcase contains a few books, clothes and a copy of my thesis, which I need for a conference on 27th November.

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So
I would
highly
appreciate if you could give me a prompt reply at your earliest convenience. My flight number was NF 1452, and my Luggage Claim Number is 02547.

Yours
faithfully
,

Paul Burrell
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter You travelled by plane last week and your suitcase was lost. You have still heard nothing from the airline company. v. 5

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  American English
7 paragraphs
157 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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