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You have had a bank account for a few years. Recently you received a letter from the bank stating that your account is $240 overdrawn and that you will be charged $70 which will be taken directly from your account. You know that this information is incorrect. v.1

You have had a bank account for a few years. Recently you received a letter from the bank stating that your account is $240 overdrawn and that you will be charged $70 which will be taken directly from your account. You know that this information is incorrect. v. 1
Dear Sir  or Madam, I am writing this letter in connection with a letter that I received from your bank two days ago. In the letter, you stated that I am $240 overdrawn and due to this, I will be charged $70 which would be deducted from my savings account. I can assure you that I have not overdrawn any amount and it must be a mistake from the bank's end which you must scrutinise before imposing on me the overdrawn charge. As you know, for the last eleven months, I have been paying $300 monthly instalment for a car loan that I took from your bank. The monthly instalments are taken directly from my savings account. However, last month I paid the outstanding amount of the loan and settled it with the bank. I even wrote to the bank instructing that I have fully paid my car loan. I received a letter from you acknowledging my request, but, for some reason, nothing was done about it. Another $300 instalment has been paid to the loan this month and this is the reason I am shown overdrawn in my statement. I am attaching the statement with this letter. No doubt this is a mistake you should correct immediately. I would like you to reverse the transaction and stop the monthly instalment payment from my savings account as the loan amount has already been settled. Thank you for giving the matter your attention and I hope to hear your reply soon. Yours faithfully, Sandra Roll
Dear Sir
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or Madam,

I am writing this
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letter
in connection with a
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letter
that I received from your
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bank
two days ago. In the
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letter
, you stated that I am $240
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overdrawn
and due to this, I will
be charged
$70 which would
be deducted
from my savings account. I can assure you that I have not
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overdrawn
any amount and it
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must
be a mistake from the bank's
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end
which you
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must
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scrutinise
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before
imposing on me the
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overdrawn
charge.

As you know, for the last eleven months, I have been paying $300 monthly
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instalment
for a car
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loan
that I took from your
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bank
. The monthly
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instalments
are taken
directly
from my savings account.
However
, last month I paid the outstanding amount of the
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loan
and settled it with the
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bank
. I even wrote to the
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bank
instructing that I have
fully
paid my car
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loan
. I received a
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letter
from you acknowledging my request,
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but
, for
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some
reason, nothing
was done
about it. Another $300
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instalment
has
been paid
to the
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loan
this month and this is the reason I
am shown
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overdrawn
in my statement. I am attaching the statement with this letter.

No doubt this is a mistake you should correct immediately. I would like you to reverse the transaction and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
the monthly
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instalment
payment from my savings account as the
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loan
amount has already
been settled
.

Thank you for giving the matter your attention and I hope to hear your reply
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soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Sandra Roll
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have had a bank account for a few years. Recently you received a letter from the bank stating that your account is $240 overdrawn and that you will be charged $70 which will be taken directly from your account. You know that this information is incorrect. v. 1

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
253 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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