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You have had a bank account for a few years. Recently you received a letter from the bank stating that your account is $240 overdrawn and that you will be charged $70 which will be taken directly from your account. You know that this information is incorrect. v. 2

Dear Sir  or Madam, I am writing in response to a letter (Ref. : PB-25478 R/TA as of 19th March 2019) that I received from the Bank that stated that I would be charged $70 from my account, in lieu of an overdrawn amount of $240 made on 15th March 2019. Please note that I have not overdrawn from my saving account and thus should not be charged any fee. On 15th March 2019, I made a purchase of $480 from the 7Eleven supermarket. During the checkout, the shopkeeper accidentally swiped the debit card twice but realising his mistake, has immediately reversed the transaction and confirmed that the reversal would be done successfully in 3 business days. I later received an SMS regarding the reversal on 19th March. However, according to the statement, I was charged the same amount twice on that day, which is a mistake. Therefore, I would request you not to charge me $70 for the overdrawn that I did not do. It is indeed a mistake and your bank should have already rectified it. Thank you for giving this your attention and I hope to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully, Riya Nagpal

IELTS letter You have had a bank account for a few years. Recently you received a letter from the bank stating that your account is $240 overdrawn and that you will be charged $70 which will be taken directly from your account. You know that this information is incorrect. v.2

Dear Sir
 
or Madam, I am writing in response to a letter (Ref.
:
PB-25478 R/TA as of 19th March 2019) that I received from the Bank that stated that I would
be charged
$70 from my account, in lieu of an overdrawn amount of $240 made on 15th March 2019.
Please
note that I have not overdrawn from my saving account and
thus
should not
be charged
any fee. On 15th March 2019, I made a
purchase
of $480 from the 7Eleven supermarket. During the checkout, the shopkeeper
accidentally
swiped the debit card twice
but
realising
his mistake, has immediately reversed the transaction and confirmed that the reversal would
be done
successfully
in 3 business days. I later received an SMS regarding the reversal on 19th March.
However
, according to the statement, I
was charged
the same amount twice on that day, which is a mistake.
Therefore
, I would request you not to charge me $70 for the overdrawn that I did not do. It is
indeed
a mistake and your bank should have already rectified it. Thank you for giving this your attention and I hope to hear from you
soon
. Yours
faithfully
,
Riya
Nagpal
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
Letter
7 paragraphs
196 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resources: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Band score ≤ 6
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