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Letter to new employee start job next month with you at office. * detail about office* details about first day* what to bring to office v.2

Letter to new employee start job next month with you at office. * detail about office* details about first day* what to bring to office v. 2
Dear Mr. Jorge, I am writing this letter to give you a brief introduction about our company working process. Since you are going to join here as a fresher. I believe that these facts would be really important for you. Let me explain in more detail. As you are already aware about your joining date, I would like you to explain the company culture, working hours, dress code etc. Atilasia technogies is a one of the best places to work in USA. We don’t maintain any record related to your attendance. Working hours are flexible. You will be given an introduction programme on your first day by our Human resources team. they will make you aware about all the details which are related to company. You do not need to bring any computer equipment as we provide the to all our employees. In addition to that, you will be assigned to “Abc project” from the first day onwards. But training and knowledge transferring sessions will be conducted by our team leader. These are the main things which you should know about our company. If you have any question, do not hesitate to ask from me. Looking forward to see you Monday. Your Sincerely, Rekha Ferdasanz
Dear Mr. Jorge,

I am writing this letter to give you a brief introduction about our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
working process. Since you are going to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
here as a fresher. I believe that these facts would be
really
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important
for you.

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Let
me
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
in more detail. As you are already aware about your joining date, I would like you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
culture, working hours, dress code etc.
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Atilasia
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technogies
is a one of the best places to work
A determiner is probably missing here: "in the USA".
in USA
. We don’t maintain any record related to your attendance. Working hours are flexible. You will be
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given
an introduction
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programme
on your
first
day by our Human resources team.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
they
will
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make
you aware about all the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
which
are related
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
. You do not need to bring any computer equipment as we provide the to all our employees.

In addition
to that, you will
be assigned
to “
Possible spelling mistake found.
Abc
project” from the
first
day onwards.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
training and knowledge transferring sessions will
be conducted
by our team leader. These are the main things which you should know about our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
. If you have any question, do not hesitate to ask from me.

Looking forward to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
you Monday.

Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
Your
Sincerely
,

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Rekha
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Ferdasanz
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes
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IELTS letter Letter to new employee start job next month with you at office. * detail about office* details about first day* what to bring to office v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
204 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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