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A colleague at work is organizing a goodbye party which you’re not able to attend. Write a letter to him/her. In the letter, you should: Explain reason why you cannot attendgood memories you have spenthow you will stay in touch. v.2

A colleague at work is organizing a goodbye party which you’re not able to attend. Write a letter to him/her. In the letter, you should: Explain reason why you cannot attendgood memories you have spenthow you will stay in touch. v. 2
Dear Mr Ryan Lee, I regret to inform you that I cannot attend your farewell party which, you are organizing, on the 31st of August. According to company policy I have to carry out a quality check and perform an audit of inventory at the factory at the end of every month. Since I will be occupied the whole day I will not be able to make it back in time for the party. However, let me tell you about the good memories we had. Firstly, you never hesitated to help me even though you were senior in position. Secondly, you have amazing management and teamwork skills, which helped us onboard many important projects and also gave us exposure in client facing roles. Lastly, You have been more like a friend than a colleague and I am deeply saddened to see you leave. All the stressful yet fun times we had together will be greatly missed. Therefore, I am looking forward to continuing our friendship and staying in contact. Please save my personal mobile number (987654321) and email address - marysmith@yahoo. com. In addition, I hope we do not break our tradition of going out for dinner every Friday after work. Thank you for your contribution and wishing you all the best for your future endeavors. Yours Faithfully, Mary Smith
Dear Mr Ryan Lee,

I regret to inform you that I cannot attend your farewell party which, you are organizing, on the 31st of August. According to
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company
policy I
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have to
carry out a quality
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check
and perform an audit of inventory at the factory at the
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end
of every month. Since I will
be occupied
the whole day I will not be able to
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make
it back in time for the party.

However
,
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let
me
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tell
you about the
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good
memories we had.
Firstly
, you never hesitated to
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help
me
even though
you were senior in position.
Secondly
, you have amazing management and teamwork
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skills
, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
us onboard
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many
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important
projects and
also
gave us exposure in client facing roles.
Lastly
, You have been more like a friend than a
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colleague and
I am
deeply
saddened to
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see
you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
. All the stressful
yet
fun times we had together will be
greatly
missed.

Therefore
, I am looking forward to continuing our friendship and staying in contact.
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Please
save my personal mobile number (987654321) and email address
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
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marysmith@yahoo
.
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com
.
In addition
, I hope we do not break our tradition of going out for dinner every Friday after work.

Thank you for your contribution and wishing you all the best for your future endeavors.

Yours
Faithfully
,

Mary Smith
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter A colleague at work is organizing a goodbye party which you’re not able to attend. Write a letter to him/her. In the letter, you should: Explain reason why you cannot attendgood memories you have spenthow you will stay in touch. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
219 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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