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A letter to your friend who were traveling overseas, and you were staying at their apartment. There was a storm at that time and the apartment got damaged. In the letter, you should: •tell your friend about the storm•explain how the damage got•detail v.1

A letter to your friend who were traveling overseas, and you were staying at their apartment. There was a storm at that time and the apartment got damaged. In the letter, you should: •tell your friend about the storm•explain how the damage got•detail v. 1
Dear John, How is your trip going on in Singapore? I hope this letter finds you well. I have sad news for you that last Monday, a storm hit our city. It was a horrifying experience as wind was blowing 150 km/hour. I am sure that you might have received notification on weather forecast app. Heartbreaking news is that your roof at the back room was damaged as a hung tree branch fall on it. Although the weight of that branch was quite high, damage was only restricted to roof due to strong steel reinforcement. I have already contacted a local builder to repair the roof. The cost of repair will not be more than Rs. 20000 as per the builder and it will take only three days to correct the damage. Moreover, contractor suggested me to use steel roof instead of asbestos roof, which will cost us Rs. 1000 more. You do not worry about your house, as I will take care of the repairing process. Let me know your thought whether we should go for steel roof or asbestos roof as soon as you receive this mail. Regards, Bibhu
Dear John,

How is your trip going on in Singapore? I hope this letter finds you well. I have
Did you mean "said"?
sad
news for you that last Monday, a storm hit our city. It was a horrifying experience as wind was blowing 150 km/hour. I am sure that you might have received notification on weather forecast app.

Heartbreaking news is that your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roof
at the back room
was damaged
as a hung tree branch fall on it. Although the weight of that branch was quite high, damage was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
restricted to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roof
due to strong steel reinforcement.

I have already contacted a local builder to repair the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roof
. The cost of repair will not be more than Rs. 20000 as per the builder and it will take
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
three days to correct the damage.
Moreover
, contractor suggested me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
steel
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roof
instead
of asbestos
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roof
, which will cost us Rs. 1000 more.

You do not worry about your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
, as I will take care of the repairing process.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Let
me know your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
whether we should go for steel
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roof
or asbestos
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roof
as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as you receive this mail.

Regards,

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Bibhu
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter A letter to your friend who were traveling overseas, and you were staying at their apartment. There was a storm at that time and the apartment got damaged. In the letter, you should: •tell your friend about the storm•explain how the damage got•detail v. 1

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
190 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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