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You have a permanent job and few weeks ago you have started a part time short course You are not satisfied with it and want to change this part time course Write a letter to your professor explaining why you are not satisfied with your present part time c v.2

You have a permanent job and few weeks ago you have started a part time short course You are not satisfied with it and want to change this part time course Write a letter to your professor explaining why you are not satisfied with your present part time c v. 2
Dear John, I am Mary, a student of your economics batch. I am writing this letter in regards to change my part-time course from Economics to Human Resources, as unfortunately I am not satisfied continuing with economics classes. As you are aware that along with this part-time course, I am working permanently with a major IT company where I have to spend around 9-10 hours of my day on a regular basis. Current schedule of economics class is 4 PM to 6 PM every alternate day of the week, which mostly does not go well with my office hours. Along with that I have to drive around 30 mins from my home to take this class, as this is being organized in downtown. Whereas the Human resource sessions are mostly scheduled at 8 PM to 9 PM on weekends, which I think will be more suitable to me and fit to my office schedule as well. Also, these classes are held comparatively closer from my home, which will definitely save my travel time too. Last but not the least, I think human resource will be a better alternative for my future growth in comparison to studying economics. I hope you will understand my problems and help me in smooth transitioning from Economics to Human resource. your' s faithfully Mary
Dear John,

I am Mary, a student of your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economics
batch. I am writing this letter
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
in regards to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
my part-time course from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Economics
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Human
Resources, as unfortunately I am not satisfied continuing with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economics
classes.

As you are aware that along with this part-time course, I am working
permanently
with a major IT
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
where I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
spend around 9-10 hours of my day on a regular basis.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Current
schedule of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economics
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
is 4 PM to 6 PM every alternate day of the week, which
mostly
does not go well with my office hours. Along with that I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
drive around 30
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mins
from my home to take this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
, as this is
being organized
in downtown. Whereas the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Human
resource sessions are
mostly
scheduled at 8 PM to 9 PM on weekends, which I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
will be more suitable to me and fit to my office schedule
as well
.
Also
, these classes
are held
comparatively
The usual collocation for "closer" is "to" not "from". Did you mean simply "closer to" or "further from"?
closer from my
home, which will definitely save my travel time too. Last
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
not the least, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
human
resource will be a better alternative for my future growth
in comparison
to studying economics.

I hope you will understand my problems and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me in smooth transitioning from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Economics
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Human
resource.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
your&
#039; s
faithfully


Mary
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have a permanent job and few weeks ago you have started a part time short course You are not satisfied with it and want to change this part time course Write a letter to your professor explaining why you are not satisfied with your present part time c v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
218 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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