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You recently read an article in newspaper about someone you know personally. You found some information is wrong. Write a letter to editor to inform him about it. Use following points: What is the article about? What is the error? What you expect an editor t v.2

You recently read an article in newspaper about someone you know personally. You found some information is wrong. Write a letter to editor to inform him about it. Use following points: What is the article about? What is the error? What you expect an editor t v. 2
Dear Sir I am writing to you regarding the recent article you published about Sir David Markham last week, April 2nd, in The Times newspaper. The article gives a breif biography of Sir David’s life and then continues to focus on his work and the impact it has had. The biography starts with his birth in Edinburgh and his later move in 1962 to Durham University. From there, it focuses on his work with the UN. I would like to point out an error in your article. Documentation shows that Sir David did not go directly from Edinburgh to the University of Durham, in 1961. In fact he took a gap year in Europe working with a volunteer program and then went to University in 1962. I know this as I worked with him in Europe and become friends with him. His year abroad, which is absent from your article, created the foundation of his philosophy of life which guided him through his work in later years. I hope you will publish this correction in the newspaper. Sir David’s work is still of immense importance and people should know the importance of that gap year in his life. Looking forward to a positive reply. Yours sincerely, Jane Frankland
Dear Sir

I am writing to you regarding the recent
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article
you published about Sir David Markham last week, April 2nd, in The Times newspaper.

The
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article
gives a
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breif
biography of Sir David’s life and then continues to focus on his
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work
and the impact it has had. The biography
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starts
with his birth in Edinburgh and his later
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move
in 1962 to Durham University. From there, it focuses on his
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work
with the UN.

I would like to point out an error in your
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article
. Documentation
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shows
that Sir David did not go
directly
from Edinburgh to the University of Durham, in 1961. In
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fact he
took a gap year in Europe working with a volunteer program and then went to University in 1962. I know this as I worked with him in Europe and become friends with him. His year abroad, which is absent from your
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article
, created the foundation of his philosophy of life which guided him through his
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work
in later years.

I hope you will publish this correction in the newspaper. Sir David’s
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work
is
still
of immense importance and
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people
should know the importance of that gap year in his life.

Looking forward to a
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positive
reply.

Yours
sincerely
,

Jane
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IELTS letter You recently read an article in newspaper about someone you know personally. You found some information is wrong. Write a letter to editor to inform him about it. Use following points: What is the article about? What is the error? What you expect an editor t v. 2

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8 paragraphs
207 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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