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You are planning a short visit to a city where your relatives lives explain when and how long you will be in town ask whether you can stay at their home offer to pay for yourself v.2

You are planning a short visit to a city where your relatives lives explain when and how long you will be in town ask whether you can stay at their home offer to pay for yourself v. 2
Dear Aunt and Uncle, Warm regards! Hope you find this letter in radiant health and best of the spirits. I am feeling pleased while inscribing this epistle to apprise you with my three days itinerary to your hometown commencing from 25th of April. Even though it is a business trip but i would aspire to live with two of you so i could snatch some quality time to spend. Frankly speaking, my organisation is approaching me for the booking of rooms at a hotel, rather than residing in a strange surrounding i would prefer to live in closely associated environment. Beside all of this, i want to ensure your permission first if you guys feel comfortable because invading privacy is not my cup of tea. Furthermore, it would be highly appreciable if you accept me as a paying guest for the stay, reason to this is that i am well aware of the prevailing financial instability at your place. Therefore, this way i could join hand to support you. I anticipate a positive and prompt response from your end as soon as possible. Your lovingly, Samvedna Puri.
Dear Aunt and Uncle,

Warm regards! Hope you find this letter in radiant health and best of the spirits. I am feeling
pleased
while inscribing this epistle to apprise you with my three days itinerary to your hometown commencing from 25th of April.

Even though
it is a business trip
but
i
would aspire to
live
with two of you
so
i
could snatch
some
quality time to spend.
Frankly
speaking, my
organisation
is approaching me for the booking of rooms at a hotel,
rather
than residing in a strange surrounding
i
would prefer to
live
in
closely
associated environment. Beside all of this,
i
want to ensure your permission
first
if you guys feel comfortable
because
invading privacy is not my cup of tea.

Furthermore
, it would be
highly
appreciable if you accept me as a paying guest for the stay, reason to this is that
i
am well aware of the prevailing financial

instability
at your place.
Therefore
, this way
i
could
join
hand to support you.

I anticipate a
positive
and prompt response from your
end
as
soon
as possible.

Your
lovingly
,

Samvedna
Puri
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS letter You are planning a short visit to a city where your relatives lives explain when and how long you will be in town ask whether you can stay at their home offer to pay for yourself v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
187 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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