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You have a friend who lives in another country. Write a letter to this friend to visit you. In your letter: • invite him/her to a public event in your country• describe the public event• explain about other plans you have for your friend when he/she w v.4

You have a friend who lives in another country. Write a letter to this friend to visit you. In your letter: • invite him/her to a public event in your country• describe the public event• explain about other plans you have for your friend when he/she w v. 4
Dear Anna, Hello, how are you? I hope you are having a joyous time. I am writing this letter to invite you to visit my country and spend some time with me. I would like you to visit me in the month of January as I am very interested for you to attend the Republic Day event on 26th of January. I am sure you will enjoy the event and will get to know about the history of India and period of glory and sacrifices by our great leaders for their country On 26th of January Republic Day is celebrated as on this day the constitution of India came into force on 26th January 1950. On this day, flag hoisting ceremonies and parades by armed forces and school children are held at Rajpath in New Delhi, which showcases a multi-hued image of the country' s rich cultural heritage and military prowess. Moreover, people pay tribute to the martyrs who have sacrificed their lives for the country and to confer bravery awards to gallantry award winners such as military persons, citizenry and children for showing courage in the face of adversity. I have planned several other activities for us to enjoy. We will visit all the monuments and historical places in Delhi. Furthermore, we will not only enjoy the scrumptious and succulent street food in Delhi but will also do a lot of shopping. Inform me once you will book the tickets and since in January there are winters please keep warm clothes as well as medicines you require. Take care and see you soon, With love, Prabhpreet Kaur
Dear Anna,

Hello, how are you? I hope you are having a joyous time. I am writing this letter to invite you to visit my country and spend
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some
time with me.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would like you to visit me in the month of January as I am
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very
The usual collocation for "interested" is "in" not "for". Did you mean "interested in"?
interested for
you to attend the Republic Day
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event
on 26th of January.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am sure you will enjoy the
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event
and will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
to know about the history of India and period of glory and sacrifices by our great leaders for their
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country


On 26th of January Republic Day
is celebrated
as on this day the constitution of India came into force on 26th January 1950. On this day, flag hoisting ceremonies and parades by armed forces and school children
are held
at
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Rajpath
in New Delhi, which showcases a multi-hued image of the
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country&
#039; s rich cultural heritage and military prowess.
Moreover
,
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people
pay tribute to the martyrs who have sacrificed their
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lives
for the country and to confer bravery awards to gallantry award winners such as military persons, citizenry and children for showing courage in the face of adversity.

I have planned several other activities for us to enjoy. We will visit all the monuments and historical places in Delhi.
Furthermore
, we will not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
enjoy the scrumptious and succulent street food in Delhi
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but
will
also
do
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a lot of
shopping.

Inform me once you will book the tickets and since in January there are winters
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
warm clothes
as well
as medicines you require.

Take care and
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see
you
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soon
,

With
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love
,

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Prabhpreet
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Kaur
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have a friend who lives in another country. Write a letter to this friend to visit you. In your letter: • invite him/her to a public event in your country• describe the public event• explain about other plans you have for your friend when he/she w v. 4

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
267 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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