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You are getting married soon. Write a letter to your friend from a different country and invite him/her to the wedding. In your letter– Describe your future wife/husband. – What will happen at the wedding? – Why do you want to invite him/her? v.2

You are getting married soon. Write a letter to your friend from a different country and invite him/her to the wedding. In your letter– Describe your future wife/husband. – What will happen at the wedding? – Why do you want to invite him/her? v. 2
Hi Lizzy, I hope you are fine. My wedding ceremony is coming up in two months time and I am writing to invite you to the event. The woman I am getting married to is a tall, fair, beautiful young lady, who is in her early twenties. I met her during a charity event, organized by my company, at an orphanage home. She came with some friends, and was introduced to me by a colleague of mine on that same occasion. I observed with admiration how she cared for the kids at the orphanage and that endeared her to me immediately. She is a good cook and can prepare both local and international dishes. The marriage ceremony is a fun packed event. First their will be the maiden dance, during which, the bride is expected to dance with some maidens. At some point, the groom will join the bride and her maidens in the dance, while the father of the bride watches on to see how the groom carters for the daughter. If he is not satisfied or finds out that the man he wants to give the daughter to was attracted to another lady during the dance, he can call off the marriage immediately. This activity is followed by a toast and the cutting of cake, after which, everybody is given food to eat. During this period, people can bring their gifts and the man and woman are officially pronounced husband and wife. I am inviting you to this event so you could use this opportunity to witness our culture and compare it with your own. I have once witnessed a marriage ceremony by two Canadians. Though it was fun too, but not as thrilling as ours. You will also use this opportunity to visit some nice sites in Nigeria. There are several locations here, that visitors troop to. I will keep the list as secrete until you arrive. My dear friend, this is one journey you will relish to tell the stories to everyone and I look forward to seeing you. Yours friend, Chinedu.
Hi Lizzy,

I hope you are fine. My wedding ceremony is coming up in two months
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time and
I am writing to invite you to the
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event
.

The woman I am getting married to is a tall,
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fair
,
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beautiful
young lady, who is in her early twenties. I met her during a charity
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event
, organized by my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
, at an orphanage home. She came with
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some
friends, and
was introduced
to me by a colleague of mine on that same occasion. I observed with admiration how she cared for the kids at the orphanage and that endeared her to me immediately. She is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
cook and can prepare both local and international dishes.

The marriage ceremony is a
Make sure that the adjective 'fun' is correct. Possibly, it should be an adverb (typically ~ly) that modifies 'packed'. Possibly, it should be the first word in a compound adjective (hyphenated adjective). Possibly, it is correct.
fun packed
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event
.
First
their will be the maiden
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dance
, during which, the bride is
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expected
to
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dance
with
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some
maidens. At
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some
point, the groom will
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join
the bride and her maidens in the
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dance
, while the father of the bride
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watches
on to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
how the groom carters for the daughter. If he is not satisfied or finds out that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
man
he wants to give the daughter to
was attracted
to another lady during the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dance
, he can call off the marriage immediately. This activity
is followed
by a toast and the cutting of cake, after which, everybody is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
food to eat. During this period,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
can bring their gifts and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
man
and woman are
officially
pronounced husband and wife.

I am inviting you to this
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event
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so
you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
this opportunity to witness our culture and compare it with your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
. I have once witnessed a marriage ceremony by two Canadians. Though it was fun too,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
not as thrilling as ours. You will
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
this opportunity to visit
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
nice sites in Nigeria. There are several locations here, that visitors troop to. I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
the list as secrete until you arrive.

My dear friend, this is one journey you will relish to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
the stories to everyone and I look forward to seeing you.

Yours friend,

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Chinedu
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2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter You are getting married soon. Write a letter to your friend from a different country and invite him/her to the wedding. In your letter– Describe your future wife/husband. – What will happen at the wedding? – Why do you want to invite him/her? v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
346 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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