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You are attending a night course in the school. you are not happy with some parts of the course. Write a letter to the school director about this. In your letter, you should tell: • what course you are studying • what things you are not happy abo v.2

You are attending a night course in the school. you are not happy with some parts of the course. Write a letter to the school director about this. In your letter, you should tell: • what course you are studying • what things you are not happy abo v. 2
Dear sir/madam I am writing to you regarding an issue with night class called Art history. I started art course 2017 and currently it is my last year. I have to write thesis and defend it in June 2020. I choose night course art history with Mr Smith as I want to compare different art levels in my last thesis. At the moment I am not happy about Mr Smith studying methods. He is always late in his class and after he arrives we watch movies or having a discussion in groups. This is not helping me with my final thesis because my grade is depending on it. I wrote to you because you can do something about it. As you are a headmaster you should talk to him and discuss his contract over again as this is not suitable for being an teacher. I hope this issue will be resolved and in a future we have better study method. Yours faithfully Claire Bird
Dear sir/madam

I am writing to you regarding an issue with night
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class
called
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Art
history.

I
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started
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art
course 2017 and
currently
it is my last year.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
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have to
write thesis and defend it in June 2020.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
choose night course
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art
history with Mr Smith as I want to compare
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different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
levels in my last thesis.

At the moment I am not happy about Mr Smith studying methods. He is always late in his
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
and after he arrives we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
movies or having a discussion in groups. This is not helping me with my final thesis
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
my grade
The verb 'depending' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
is depending
on it.

I wrote to you
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because
you can do something about it. As you are a headmaster you should talk to him and discuss his contract over again as this is not suitable for being
Use "a" instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
an
teacher.

I hope this issue will
be resolved
and in a future we have better study method.

Yours
faithfully


Claire Bird
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter You are attending a night course in the school. you are not happy with some parts of the course. Write a letter to the school director about this. In your letter, you should tell: • what course you are studying • what things you are not happy abo v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
163 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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