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You are attending a night course in the school. you are not happy with some parts of the course. Write a letter to the school director about this. In your letter, you should tell: • what course you are studying • what things you are not happy abo v.2

You are attending a night course in the school. you are not happy with some parts of the course. Write a letter to the school director about this. In your letter, you should tell: • what course you are studying • what things you are not happy abo v. 2

Dear sir/madam I am writing to you regarding an issue with night class called Art history. I started art course 2017 and currently it is my last year. I have to write thesis and defend it in June 2020. I choose night course art history with Mr Smith as I want to compare different art levels in my last thesis. At the moment I am not happy about Mr Smith studying methods. He is always late in his class and after he arrives we watch movies or having a discussion in groups. This is not helping me with my final thesis because my grade is depending on it. I wrote to you because you can do something about it. As you are a headmaster you should talk to him and discuss his contract over again as this is not suitable for being an teacher. I hope this issue will be resolved and in a future we have better study method. Yours faithfully Claire Bird

Dear sir/madam

I am writing to you regarding an issue with night This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :coursetraining
class
 called You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcraftprofession
Art
 history.

I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcraftprofession
art
 course 2017 and currently
 it is my last year. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 write thesis and defend it in June 2020. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 choose night course You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcraftprofession
art
 history with Mr Smith as I want to compare This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcraftprofession
art
 levels in my last thesis.

At the moment I am not happy about Mr Smith studying methods. He is always late in his This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :coursetraining
class
 and after he arrives we This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :monitor
watch
 movies or having a discussion in groups. This is not helping me with my final thesis This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 my grade The verb 'depending' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
is depending
 on it.

I wrote to you This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 you can do something about it. As you are a headmaster you should talk to him and discuss his contract over again as this is not suitable for being Use "a" instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'a
an
 teacher.

I hope this issue will be resolved
 and in a future we have better study method.

Yours faithfully


Claire Bird

1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter You are attending a night course in the school. you are not happy with some parts of the course. Write a letter to the school director about this. In your letter, you should tell: • what course you are studying • what things you are not happy abo v. 2

Letter

American English

8 paragraphs

163 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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