Hi Uloma,
How are you? I hope this letter meets you well. Our new yam festival is coming up on the 25th September and I' m inviting you to the ceremony. This is an opportunity to experience my culture like you have always wanted.
The new yam festival is an annual event that marks the beginning of the harvesting period in my country. On the first day of the celebration, every family harvests the biggest yam tuber in their farm. This yam is cooked by the mother of the house. The head of the family then prays over it, blesses every member of his family and the food is shared to everybody, including their visitors. Over the next three days, different music groups parade on the streets, singing and dancing. It is such a glamorous event.
I am also planning other activities for you during this period. Before the end of the event, we shall go to the lake where we will take a boat ride. You will also see other visitors from different countries. Oguta lake is one of the most popular places for tourists who come to Nigeria and do not be surprised if we meet people from your country there. Also I will take you to the Oka museum that you have always talked about. I bet you, you will relish every moment in my town.
I really hope you will be able to make it. See you soon.
All the best,
Chinedu. 
Hi  
Uloma
,
How are you? I hope this letter meets you well. Our new yam festival is coming up on the 25th September and  
I&
#039; m inviting you to the ceremony. This is an opportunity to experience my culture like you have always wanted.
The new yam festival is an annual  
event
 that marks the beginning of the harvesting period in my country. On the  
first
 day of the celebration, every family harvests the biggest yam tuber in their farm. This yam  
is cooked
 by the mother of the  
house
. The head of the family then prays over it, blesses every member of his family and the food  
is shared
 to everybody, including their visitors. Over the  
next
 three days,  
different
 music groups parade on the streets, singing and dancing. It is such a glamorous  
event
.
I am  
also
 planning other activities for you during this period.  
Before
 the  
end
 of the  
event
, we shall go to the lake where we will take a boat ride. You will  
also
  see
 other visitors from  
different
 countries.  
Oguta
 lake is one of the most popular places for tourists who  
come
 to Nigeria and do not  
be surprised
 if we  
meet
  people
 from your country there.  
Also
 I will take you to the  
Oka
 museum that you have always talked about. I bet you, you will relish every moment in my town.
I  
really
 hope you will be able to  
make
 it.  
See
 you  
soon
.
All the best, 
Chinedu
. 
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