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You are going on holiday next week and you need to ask your friend to watch your dog while you are away. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, -state how long you will be away, -tell them what needs to be done. -state how you will compensate them. v.2

You are going on holiday next week and you need to ask your friend to watch your dog while you are away. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, -state how long you will be away, -tell them what needs to be done. -state how you will compensate them. v. 2
Dear Adam, Hope you are very well and this letter find you fine. I am writing this letter to get help related to my puppy, whose name is Lucky, during the my abroad trip. As I have mentioned before, I am going to go to The UK to participate in London Finance Conference with by my employer on 28th of December. According the conference brochure, I get, it would last about four or five day and during the these time I need to your assistance for my dog. It is an important matter that my puppy were just born one month ago therefore it will need to be feed three times a day by giving a handful dog food and fresh-daily milk. Please do not worry my friend it will not cause any problem or damage regarding your furnitures at your home. However, Please keep far away it from bath not to be sick. I know exactly that I will owe you for your helping and I am promising that it will not be unrequited for you. In case of emergency situations or if you need some help, please let me know via cell phone. See you soon.
Dear Adam,

Hope you are
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well and this letter find you fine. I am writing this letter to
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get
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help
related to my puppy, whose name is Lucky, during
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the my abroad
trip.

As I have mentioned
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, I am going to go to The UK to participate in London Finance Conference with by my employer on 28th of December.

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According the
conference brochure, I
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get
, it would last about four or five day and during the these time I need to your assistance for my dog. It is an
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important
matter that my puppy were
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just
born one month ago
therefore
it will need to
be feed
three times a day by giving a handful dog food and fresh-daily milk.

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Please
do not worry my friend it will not cause any problem or damage regarding your
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furnitures at
your home.
However
,
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Please
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keep
far away it from bath not to be sick.

I know exactly that I will owe you for your
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
helping and
I am promising that it will not
be unrequited
for you.

In case of emergency situations or if you need
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some
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help
,
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please
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let
me know via cell phone.

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See
you
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soon
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0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter You are going on holiday next week and you need to ask your friend to watch your dog while you are away. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, -state how long you will be away, -tell them what needs to be done. -state how you will compensate them. v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
198 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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