Dear Robert,
It seems like ages since we last met and time indeed flies. I am very sorry that I had not been in touch with you as frequently as I should have in the last few months. I had been terribly busy and could scarcely manage time for myself or for my family. I hope Samantha and Anna are doing great.
I have decided to enrol in a professional graphics designing course in Melbourne, Australia and I went through websites of different colleges in Melbourne. You are the best person I know to advise me on this. I prefer a college from your city because my uncle lives there with his family and being in the same city where you live in would be an advantage for me.
For the last three years, I have been working as a tech support member for a large IT company and as you know Math was my major in our school. I am quite confused about which college I should apply to and this is why I am turning to you for the advice. I would really appreciate your help regarding this. Also, can you find out what additional qualifications like an English language test score and so on are required to get admitted to such a college?
I hope you would not mind doing this for me and I would proceed according to your advice.
Take care and write me back when it is convenient for you.
Best regards,
Anthony
Dear Robert,
It seems like ages since we last met and time  
indeed
 flies. I am  
very
 sorry that I had not been in touch with you as  
frequently
 as I should have in the last few months. I had been  
terribly
 busy and could  
scarcely
 manage time for myself or for my family.  
I
 hope Samantha and Anna are doing great. 
I
 have decided to enrol in a professional graphics designing course in Melbourne, Australia and I went through websites of  
different
 colleges in Melbourne. You are the best person I know to advise me on this. I prefer a college from your city  
because
 my uncle  
lives
 there with his family and being in the same city where you  
live
 in would be an advantage for me.
For the last three years, I have been working as a tech support member for a large IT  
company
 and as you know Math was my major in our school. I am quite confused about which college I should apply to and this is why I am turning to you for the advice. I would  
really
 appreciate your  
help
 regarding this.  
Also
, can you find out what additional qualifications like an English language  
test
 score and  
so
 on  
are required
 to  
get
 admitted to such a college?
I hope you would not mind doing this for me and I would proceed according to your advice.
Take care and write me back when it is convenient for you.
Best regards,
Anthony
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes