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You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country. Write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter• describe a news story in your country• explain why people are inter v.3

You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country. Write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter• describe a news story in your country• explain why people are inter v. 3
Dear Sam, Hope this letter finds you in good health. It feels really good getting in touch with old friends through social media. Thanks to new technology that lets people connect with old connections. I read your email in which you were very curious to know about the current hyped news in my country. Well, let me reveal the truth and share this exciting news with you. I am so glad to share this news with you that with recent elections in my country, my desired nominated person has been elected as prime minister of Pakistan. Yes! Mr. Imran Khan, has been selected as our new PM. I have been supporting him and his party for a decade now and I am a strong believer that with his leadership our country will progress speedily. Believe me when I say, this is the most unexpected new circulating in my country at the moment. Every single person, supporting or non-supporting the party is stunned with election results. The election result has shown that undoubtedly, it is masses who chose the fate of any country. People are thrilled including me and looking forward for a better Pakistan. Despite of all corrupt leaders and parties and mishandling of votes, a good leader has been selected to rule the country. I am quite emotional writing this that now; our country is in safe hands. I have been following this person for a good long time and been one of his major critics as well but I never leave my faith in him. I am sure, you would be happy knowing it too. Looking forward to your detailed response and views over this drastic political turn, Yours Sincerely, Samantha
Dear Sam,

Hope this letter finds you in
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good
health. It feels
really
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good
getting in touch with
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old
friends through social media. Thanks to
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new
technology that
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lets
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people
connect with
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old
connections. I read your email in which you were
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very
curious to know about the
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current
hyped
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news
in my
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country
. Well,
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let
me reveal the truth and share this exciting
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news
with you. I am
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so
glad to share this
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news
with you that with recent elections in my
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country
, my desired nominated person has
been elected
as prime minister of Pakistan. Yes! Mr.
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Imran
Khan, has
been selected
as our
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new
PM. I have been supporting him and his party for a decade
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now and
I am a strong believer that with his leadership our
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country
will progress
speedily
. Believe me when I say, this is the most unexpected
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new
circulating in my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
at the moment. Every single person, supporting or non-supporting the party
is stunned
with election results. The election result has shown that
undoubtedly
, it is masses who chose the fate of any
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country
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
People
are thrilled
including me and looking forward for a better Pakistan.
Did you mean "Despite" (or, alternatively, 'in spite of')?
Despite of
all corrupt leaders and parties and mishandling of votes, a
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good
leader has
been selected
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rule
the
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country
. I am quite emotional writing this that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
; our
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country
is in safe hands. I have been following this person for a
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good
long time and been one of his major critics
as well
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but
I never
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
my faith in him.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am sure, you would be happy knowing it too. Looking forward to your detailed response and views over this drastic political turn,

Yours
Sincerely
,

Samantha
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country. Write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter• describe a news story in your country• explain why people are inter v. 3

Letter
  American English
5 paragraphs
282 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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