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The pie chart shows the number of people who were using different languages online. The table shows the average number of people online each year. v.1

The pie chart shows the number of people who were using different languages online. The table shows the average number of people online each year. v. 1
The pie graph illustrates the online usage of the variety of languages, while the table gives information about the number of people online compared to the world population on a yearly basis from November 1997 to August 2001. Overall, it is noticeable that English was the dominating language and online usage was exponentially increased over the whole period. According to the pie chart, online users were 529 million in total in December 2001, and 43% of them preferred to use English which accounted for more than two fifths. Every other language that was listed on the pie graph were shared less than 9% which are with a decreasing order, Japanese, Chinese, German, Spanish, Korean, Italian, French, Portuguese and Dutch. The other unlisted languages altogether accounted for almost 10%. The number of people who used online was 76 million in November 1997 and accounted for 1, 8% of the world population. These figures were doubled in September 1998 and reached 147 million and 3, 6%, respectively. This upward trend continued over the following three years and the online user numbers rose to 513 million and the rate reached 8, 4% in August 2001.
The pie graph illustrates the
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usage of the variety of
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languages
, while the table gives information about the number of
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people
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online
compared to the world population on a yearly basis from November 1997 to August 2001.
Overall
, it is noticeable that English was the dominating
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language
and
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online
usage was
exponentially
increased over the whole period.

According to the pie chart,
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online
users were 529
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million
in total in December 2001, and 43% of them preferred to
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use
English which accounted for more than two fifths. Every other
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language
that
was listed
on the pie graph
were shared
less than 9% which are with a decreasing order, Japanese, Chinese, German, Spanish, Korean, Italian, French, Portuguese and Dutch. The other unlisted
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languages
altogether accounted for almost 10%.

The number of
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people
who
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used
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online
was 76
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million
in November 1997 and accounted for 1, 8% of the world population. These figures
were doubled
in September 1998 and reached 147
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million
and 3, 6%,
respectively
. This upward trend continued over the following three years and the
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online
user numbers rose to 513
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million
and the rate reached 8, 4% in August 2001.
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IELTS letter The pie chart shows the number of people who were using different languages online. The table shows the average number of people online each year. v. 1

Letter
  American English
3 paragraphs
192 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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