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23. 10. 2017 You have a pen-friend living in another country and he/she is curious to learn about the major news items in your country. Write a letter to your pen-friend. In your letter: • Greet your friend and say why you are writing. • Briefly describe a v.2

23. 10. 2017 You have a pen-friend living in another country and he/she is curious to learn about the major news items in your country. Write a letter to your pen-friend. In your letter: • Greet your friend and say why you are writing. • Briefly describe a v. 2
Dear John, I am writing to continue our conversation about our countries. You have asked me to share with you some pieces of news that I consider to be interesting. So, below I present you the most interesting and important news that has happened in the motherland. To begin with, Russian Federation has significantly increased its expenditures on the development of military technology. The biggest part of the finances is being spent on modernization of existing armed vehicles and creation of novel tanks and intercontinental ballistic missiles or ICBMs with multiple warheads. Reforming the system of the school education is another item of major news. Although the Soviet Union seized its existence more than twenty-five years ago, the way children are taught at school has no been properly reorganized. So, this reform is aimed at designing a curriculum that will satisfy the requirements of tomorrow’s society. Those news stories are so crucial because they will impact lives of millions of citizens. To illustrate, investing money in the military hardware will speed up state’s economy because this kind of work may be fulfilled only inside the borders. So, the money will be poured into the local economy and about one-third of the total population will explicitly or implicitly benefit from it. The Infamous school reform is so important because about 98 percent of Russian families have progeny and all mothers, fathers and grandparents want their offspring have the best life possible and the majority of them thinks the implementation of the proposed program could destroy the future of the young people. Sincerely yours, Eugene Dubinchuk
Dear John,

I am writing to continue our conversation about our countries. You have asked me to share with you
some
pieces of
news
that I consider to be interesting.
So
, below I present you the most interesting and
important
news
that has happened in the motherland.

To
begin
with, Russian Federation has
significantly
increased its expenditures on the development of military technology. The biggest part of the finances is
being spent
on modernization of existing armed vehicles and creation of novel tanks and intercontinental ballistic missiles or ICBMs with multiple warheads. Reforming the system of the school education is another item of major
news
. Although the Soviet Union seized its existence more than twenty-five years ago, the way children
are taught
at school has
no
been
properly
reorganized.
So
, this reform
is aimed
at designing a curriculum that will satisfy the requirements of tomorrow’s society.

Those
news
stories are
so
crucial
because
they will impact
lives
of millions of citizens. To illustrate, investing money in the military hardware will
speed up
state’s economy
because
this kind of work may
be fulfilled
only
inside the borders.
So
, the money will
be poured
into the local economy and about one-third of the total population will
explicitly
or
implicitly
benefit from it. The Infamous school reform is
so
important
because
about 98 percent of Russian families have progeny and all mothers, fathers and grandparents want their offspring have the best life possible and the majority of them
thinks
the implementation of the proposed program could
destroy
the future of the young
people
.

Sincerely
yours,

Eugene
Dubinchuk
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter 23. 10. 2017 You have a pen-friend living in another country and he/she is curious to learn about the major news items in your country. Write a letter to your pen-friend. In your letter: • Greet your friend and say why you are writing. • Briefly describe a v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
263 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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