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01/11/2017Write a letter to an airline manager to find out about something you forgot on the plane during your travel. In your letter– give details about your flight– describe the item you forgot– explain why it is important that you get it back v.2

01/11/2017Write a letter to an airline manager to find out about something you forgot on the plane during your travel. In your letter– give details about your flight– describe the item you forgot– explain why it is important that you get it back v. 2
Dear Sir or Madame, I am a loyal client of your airline for almost ten years by now and I am writing to ask you about a favor. On 29th October 2017, I flew from Moscow to New York by Airbus A320, flight number NG40R10 in the first class. My seat number was A10. On this flight with me, I had a workstation Lenovo W540p with a 4K display. I was using it while I was flying. Unfortunately, I forgot my laptop in the cabin. The computer is black and has a sticker on the surface that states: “this machine kills fascists”. The workstation should be in a big read with white straps case that I used while traveling. So, I think you will identify it quickly. I want you to return this piece of equipment because the retail price of such a laptop is about three and a half thousand dollars. Moreover, some sensitive data is stored in a hard drive of the computer that should not be lost or get into wrong hands. I hope that you can help me with this problem. I am waiting for your prompt response. Sincerely yours, Eugene Dubinchuk.
Dear Sir or Madame,

I am a loyal client of your airline for almost ten years by
now and
I am writing to ask you about a favor. On 29th October 2017, I flew from Moscow to New York by Airbus A320, flight number NG40R10 in the
first
class
. My seat number was A10.

On this flight with me, I had a workstation Lenovo W540p with a 4K display. I was using it while I was flying. Unfortunately, I forgot my laptop in the cabin. The computer is black and has a sticker on the surface that states: “this machine kills fascists”. The workstation should be in a
big
read with white straps case that I
used
while traveling.
So
, I
think
you will identify it
quickly
.

I want you to return this piece of equipment
because
the retail price of such a laptop is about three and a half thousand dollars.
Moreover
,
some
sensitive data
is stored
in a
hard
drive of the computer that should not
be lost
or
get
into
wrong
hands. I hope that you can
help
me with this problem.

I am waiting for your prompt response.

Sincerely
yours,

Eugene
Dubinchuk
.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter 01/11/2017Write a letter to an airline manager to find out about something you forgot on the plane during your travel. In your letter– give details about your flight– describe the item you forgot– explain why it is important that you get it back v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
196 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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