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You cannot go to a company where you got an offer. Write a letter to the HR supervisor to: v.4

You cannot go to a company where you got an offer. Write a letter to the HR supervisor to: v. 4
Dear Sir or Madam, I have been offered a job at your company as a Business Executive and I would like to profoundly thank you for such an opportunity. It is, however, a matter of regret that I must decline your generous offer and apologise for any inconvenience caused due to this. I appreciate immensely the interview organised by your company and the extensive effort of all the staff involved. Their attitude was impressive and highly commendable. As such I must pass my sincerest apologies for any difficulties related to the extra work that must have been involved, and the time wasted on your behalf. Although the offer was substantial, it was not enough to encourage me to sever the bonds with my current employer. During my time at my present company, my superiors supported me tremendously and fostered my career. In short, they made me the employee I am today. I love my work here and would not leave them only for a slight salary increase. I would like to keep the lines of communication open between us and look forward to further correspondence. Yours faithfully, Juan Carter
Dear Sir or Madam,

I have
been offered
a job at your
company
as a Business Executive and I would like to
profoundly
thank you for such an opportunity. It is,
however
, a matter of regret that I
must
decline your generous offer and
apologise
for any inconvenience caused due to this.

I appreciate
immensely
the interview
organised
by your
company
and the extensive effort of all the staff involved. Their attitude was impressive and
highly
commendable. As such I
must
pass my sincerest apologies for any difficulties related to the extra work that
must
have
been involved
, and the time wasted on your behalf. Although the offer was substantial, it was not
enough
to encourage me to sever the bonds with my
current
employer.

During my time at my present
company
, my superiors supported me
tremendously
and fostered my career. In short, they made me the employee I am
today
. I
love
my work here and would not
leave
them
only
for a slight salary increase.

I would like to
keep
the lines of communication open between us and look forward to
further
correspondence.

Yours
faithfully
,

Juan Carter
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter You cannot go to a company where you got an offer. Write a letter to the HR supervisor to: v. 4

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
188 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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