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You cannot go to a company where you got an offer. Write a letter to the HR supervisor to: v.3

You cannot go to a company where you got an offer. Write a letter to the HR supervisor to: v. 3
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to convey my gratitude for considering me for the position of Assistant Manager at your company. Unfortunately, I have decided to continue my work with my present employer and hence cannot accept your offer. During my interview, I was impressed by the interviewers and their friendly yet professional attitude. Not to mention, your company offers a great working environment and prioritises employee growth. I have a friend who works in your company highly speaks of your management and office environment. However, the remuneration package that was suggested in the final offer letter is way less than my current salary. My employer offers several other benefits besides the salary and I see a great career growth here. I am thankful to you for the opportunity you have offered me. However, considering my job satisfaction with the current employer and the reward package, I find no other way but to decline your offer. I wish every success of your company. Yours Faithfully, Jayesh Bhuva
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to convey my gratitude for considering me for the position of Assistant Manager at your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
. Unfortunately, I have decided to continue my work with my present employer and
hence
cannot accept your offer.

During my interview, I
was impressed
by the interviewers and their friendly
yet
professional attitude. Not to mention, your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
offers
a great working environment and
Possible spelling mistake. 'prioritises' is British English.
prioritises
employee growth. I have a friend who works in your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
highly
speaks of your management and office environment.
However
, the remuneration package that
was suggested
in the final
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
offer
letter is way less than my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
salary. My employer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
offers
several other benefits
besides
the salary and I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
a great career growth here.

I am thankful to you for the opportunity you have offered me.
However
, considering my job satisfaction with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
employer and the reward package, I find no other way
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
to decline your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
offer
. I wish every success of your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

Yours
Faithfully
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Jayesh
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Bhuva
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter You cannot go to a company where you got an offer. Write a letter to the HR supervisor to: v. 3

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
170 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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