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You are working for a company and you need to take down tine off work and want to ask your manager about this v.2

You are working for a company and you need to take down tine off work and want to ask your manager about this v. 2
Dear Mr. Harry, I am writing to ask for some days off next week. I actually went to see my dentist last weekend due to incessant tooth ache and the tooth x-ray revealed that I have an undergrowth, beneath my lower right cavity, on which the last two molar teeth rests. I will actually need Thursday and Friday next week off, as those are the only days available for me to be operated upon. The surgeon only comes on Thursdays and Fridays. I would be back in the office by the following Monday. As regards my job, Miss Vera has agreed to take on my responsibilities for those two weeks, as we actually share same job role. Any job she cannot handle, I will attend to them though the company' s intranet and I would put in extra hours when I resume if occasion warrants it I hope the short leave will be granted so I could attend to my health. Yours sincerely, Favour Blessing
Dear Mr. Harry,

I am writing to
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ask for
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some
days off
next
week. I actually went to
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see
my dentist last weekend due to incessant tooth ache and the tooth x-ray revealed that I have an undergrowth, beneath my lower right cavity, on which the last two molar teeth rests.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
will actually need Thursday and Friday
next
week off, as those are the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
days available for me to
be operated
upon. The surgeon
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only
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comes
on Thursdays and Fridays. I would be back in the office by the following Monday.

As regards my job, Miss Vera has
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agreed
to take on my responsibilities for those two weeks, as we actually share same job role. Any job she cannot handle, I will attend to them though the
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#039; s intranet and I would put in extra hours when I resume if occasion warrants
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it


I hope the short
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leave
will
be granted
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so
I could attend to my health.

Yours
sincerely
,

Possible spelling mistake. 'Favour' is British English.
Favour
Blessing
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter You are working for a company and you need to take down tine off work and want to ask your manager about this v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
164 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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