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You are working for a company and you need to take down tine off work and want to ask your manager about this v.2

You are working for a company and you need to take down tine off work and want to ask your manager about this v. 2

Dear Mr. Harry, I am writing to ask for some days off next week. I actually went to see my dentist last weekend due to incessant tooth ache and the tooth x-ray revealed that I have an undergrowth, beneath my lower right cavity, on which the last two molar teeth rests. I will actually need Thursday and Friday next week off, as those are the only days available for me to be operated upon. The surgeon only comes on Thursdays and Fridays. I would be back in the office by the following Monday. As regards my job, Miss Vera has agreed to take on my responsibilities for those two weeks, as we actually share same job role. Any job she cannot handle, I will attend to them though the company' s intranet and I would put in extra hours when I resume if occasion warrants it I hope the short leave will be granted so I could attend to my health. Yours sincerely, Favour Blessing

Dear Mr. Harry,

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ask for
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some
 days off next
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see
 my dentist last weekend due to incessant tooth ache and the tooth x-ray revealed that I have an undergrowth, beneath my lower right cavity, on which the last two molar teeth rests.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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 week off, as those are the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 days available for me to be operated
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only
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comes
 on Thursdays and Fridays. I would be back in the office by the following Monday.

As regards my job, Miss Vera has This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesced
agreed
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I hope the short This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :depart
leave
 will be granted
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so
 I could attend to my health.

Yours sincerely
,

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Favour
 Blessing

2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter You are working for a company and you need to take down tine off work and want to ask your manager about this v. 2

Letter

American English

7 paragraphs

164 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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