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Write a letter to a friend who you borrowed something from that got damaged In your letter Mention what you borrowed Describe how it was damaged Say how you will fix it v.2

Write a letter to a friend who you borrowed something from that got damaged In your letter Mention what you borrowed Describe how it was damaged Say how you will fix it v. 2
Dear Chris, I hope you are doing fine today. I would like to let you know that I have a small accident yesterday night, and your vehicle Honda Civic which I did borrow for a family function got damaged from the backside. Let me explain to you in detail. I was driving back to home town to attend the wedding event of one of my relatives when the accident happened. The road was slippery due to rain, and I was on a very nominate speed when the other vehicle tried to overtake me with full speed, but he couldn’t able to control his car as the speed was high and he got hit the backside of mine car. Although, there are minor scratches on the main body; however, the bumper had been broken into two pieces. I went to the authorized dealer here in the town and asked them to replace the bumper entirely so, it will give original look rather than opting tenting and painting option. I hope, the vehicle will be ready in the next two days and will hand over to you as soon as I will be back home in the city. I thought to let you know in advance so, you won’t get shocked as it is your new Car Your friend.
Dear Chris,

I hope you are doing fine
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
.

I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
you know that I have a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
accident
This is a non-standard collocation. Normally, "last night" is used.
yesterday night
, and your vehicle Honda Civic which I did borrow for a family function
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
damaged from the backside.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Let
me
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
to you in detail. I was driving back to home town to attend the wedding
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
of one of my relatives when the accident happened. The road was slippery due to rain, and I was on a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
nominate speed when the other vehicle tried to overtake me with full speed,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
he couldn’t able to control his car as the speed was
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
high and
he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
hit the backside of mine car. Although, there are minor scratches on the main body;
however
, the bumper had
been broken
into two pieces.

I went to the authorized dealer here in the town and asked them to replace the bumper
entirely
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
, it will give original look
rather
than opting tenting and painting option. I hope, the vehicle will be ready in the
next
two days and will hand over to you as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as I will be back home in the city.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
you know in advance
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
, you won’t
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
shocked as it is your new Car

Your friend.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS letter Write a letter to a friend who you borrowed something from that got damaged In your letter Mention what you borrowed Describe how it was damaged Say how you will fix it v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
217 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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