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You are supposed to move into a new apartment next week but you cannot do so because of some problems. Write a letter to the landlored. Explain your situation. describe your problems. tell him/her when you think you can move in v.2

You are supposed to move into a new apartment next week but you cannot do so because of some problems. Write a letter to the landlored. Explain your situation. describe your problems. tell him/her when you think you can move in v. 2
Dear Mr. Smith I am your new tenant and supposed to shift in your new flat which is situated in the city centre near the Oxford university, next week. But, sorry to say, due to some circumstances, I will not be able to move into the apartment on coming Monday. In this letter, I am explaining my condition and when would I expect to shift in the flat. I went to home before moving into the apartment and had to come back before Monday because I had to do a lot of packing and to shift the luggage to the new house. Suddenly, my mother' s health got serious. We have to hospitalised her. So, in this situation, I would not be back before Monday. Being elder of all the siblings, it is my responsibility to take care of my mother. As soon as she will get discharge from the hospital, I will be back to Mumbai and do the shifting. Hope that you would understand my condition and you should not worry about the rent. I will pay for entire month. Sorry for the inconvenience caused. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely Flora Fernandas
Dear Mr. Smith

I am your new tenant and supposed to shift in your new flat which
is situated
in the city
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centre
near the Oxford university,
next
week.
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But
, sorry to say, due to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
circumstances, I will not be able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
into the apartment on coming Monday. In this letter, I am explaining my condition and when would I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expect
to shift in the flat.

I
There isn't usually a preposition before "home". Did you mean "went home"?
went to home
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before
moving into the apartment and had to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
back
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before
Monday
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because
I had to do
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a lot of
packing and to shift the luggage to the new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
.
Suddenly
, my
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mother&
#039; s health
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
serious. We
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
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hospitalised
her.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, in this situation, I would not be back
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
Monday. Being elder of all the siblings, it is my responsibility to take care of my mother. As
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as she will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
discharge from the hospital, I will be back to Mumbai and do the shifting.

Hope that you would understand my condition and you should not worry about the rent. I will pay for entire month. Sorry for the inconvenience caused.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
sincerely


Flora
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Fernandas
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter You are supposed to move into a new apartment next week but you cannot do so because of some problems. Write a letter to the landlored. Explain your situation. describe your problems. tell him/her when you think you can move in v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
197 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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