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16/10/2017 You cannot pick your friend up at the airport. Write a letter to him/her. In your letter, you shouldexplain the reasons. You should provide him/her with alternative ways to go to the hotel. You should inform him/her of your plan. v.2

16/10/2017 You cannot pick your friend up at the airport. Write a letter to him/her. In your letter, you shouldexplain the reasons. You should provide him/her with alternative ways to go to the hotel. You should inform him/her of your plan. v. 2
Dear John, I know I promised to meet you at the airport but it is literally impossible because I have a scheduled business trip to Hawaii on 29th March 2017, the day you arrive. The Hawaii journey is crucial for my career because if everything goes well, I may be promoted to a position of a head of the management department. You can get to your hotel via public transportation. There is a bus service provided that may transfer you from the main airport building to the historic centre of the city than you will need to take a tram to your hotel that is situated nearby. Another alternative is my colleague who stays in the megalopolis may give you a ride to the hotel but I am not sure whether you would like to interact with a stranger. As far as I remember, you are going to stay in Moscow for at least one month. Although I cannot meet you when you arrive, my trip will have been finished by 1st April. So, when I return, I intend to show you the most interesting landmarks and attractions of the capital and, of course, to help you make new acquaintances that could be beneficial for your future. Finally, in the middle of April, a group of friends and I are going to do some hiking in the red forest that is situated in Moscow region, I hope that you will take part in this outdoor activity as well. I am waiting for your prompt response. Sincerely yours, Eugene Dubinchuk.
Dear John,

I know I promised to
meet
you at the airport
but
it is
literally
impossible
because
I have a scheduled business trip to Hawaii on 29th March 2017, the day you arrive. The Hawaii journey is crucial for my career
because
if everything goes well, I may
be promoted
to a position of a head of the management department.

You can
get
to your hotel via public transportation. There is a bus service provided that may transfer you from the main airport building to the historic
centre
of the city than you will need to take a tram to your hotel that
is situated
nearby. Another alternative is my colleague who stays in the megalopolis may give you a ride to the hotel
but
I am not sure whether you would like to interact with a stranger.

As far as I remember, you are going to stay in Moscow for at least one month. Although I cannot
meet
you when you arrive, my trip will have
been finished
by 1st April.
So
, when I return, I intend to
show
you the most interesting landmarks and attractions of the capital and,
of course
, to
help
you
make
new acquaintances that could be beneficial for your future.
Finally
, in the middle of April, a group of friends and I are going to do
some
hiking in the red forest that
is situated
in Moscow region, I hope that you will
take part
in this outdoor activity
as well
.

I am waiting for your prompt response.

Sincerely
yours,

Eugene
Dubinchuk
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter 16/10/2017 You cannot pick your friend up at the airport. Write a letter to him/her. In your letter, you shouldexplain the reasons. You should provide him/her with alternative ways to go to the hotel. You should inform him/her of your plan. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
259 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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