Dear Mr Lee,
I am writing to you about the possibility of taking a fortnight off work in order to complete my Master’s degree in Engineering. I am almost finished writing my thesis, which must be submitted to my university by June 30th. Unfortunately, all my annual leave has been used up. Any time I took off, would naturally be unpaid; I would also check my email daily, and be available for emergency phone calls. On return, I would endeavour to come into the office earlier than usual and work Saturdays in order to catch up on anything I had missed. I have already spoken about my situation to my colleagues Mr Grunewald and Ms Tak, who are both willing to assume my responsibilities for two weeks.
I realise my temporary absence could be an inconvenience to you and the rest of the team, but in the long term, our company will benefit from my research. As you may be aware, I have been investigating 3-D printing for some time, and my thesis compares three printers already on the market with two designs pending patent and production. Since our company is considering developing software for these printers, my expertise will help give us a competitive edge.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely.
Gokhan
Dear Mr Lee,
I am writing to you about the possibility of taking a fortnight off work in order to complete my Master’s degree in Engineering. I am almost finished writing my thesis, which
must
be submitted
to my university by June 30th. Unfortunately, all my annual
leave
has been
used
up. Any time I took off, would
naturally
be unpaid; I would
also
check
my email daily, and be available for emergency phone calls. On return, I would
endeavour
to
come
into the office earlier than usual and work Saturdays in order to catch up on anything I had missed. I have already spoken about my situation to my colleagues Mr Grunewald and Ms
Tak
, who are both willing to assume my responsibilities for two weeks.
I
realise
my temporary absence could be an inconvenience to you and the rest of the team,
but
in the long term, our
company
will benefit from my research. As you may be aware, I have been investigating 3-D printing for
some
time, and my thesis compares three printers already on the market with two designs pending patent and production. Since our
company
is considering developing software for these printers, my expertise will
help
give us a competitive edge.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours
sincerely
.
Gokhan
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