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Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: Ask for some time off to complete a qualification. Suggest what you will do later at work if you have to time off. Say how the qualification helps your job or company. v.4

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: Ask for some time off to complete a qualification. Suggest what you will do later at work if you have to time off. Say how the qualification helps your job or company. v. 4
I am writing to you about the possibility of taking a fortnight off work in order to complete my Master’s degree in Engineering. Currently, I am doing Master' s degree in advanced analytics which I have almost is going to complete my thesis. I am looking to take off regarding my above-mentioned leave plan in order to complete my pending project works. Now our project also is getting closure to development stage which I do not have a much work. Also, I already shared my knowledge with my colleagues. They can able to handle this project during my absence. I hope, this project is going to the next phase that we really need advanced analytics due to this my experience which really helps to move our project into good initiation. I hope, you will also very happy with my new skill experience. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, John
I am writing to you about the possibility of taking a fortnight off work in order to complete my Master’s degree in Engineering.

Currently
, I am doing
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#039; s degree in advanced analytics which I have almost is going to complete my thesis. I am looking to take off regarding my above-mentioned
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leave
plan in order to complete my pending
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project
works.
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Now
our
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project
also
is getting closure to development stage which I do not have
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a much
work.
Also
, I already shared my knowledge with my colleagues. They
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can able to
handle this
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project
during my absence.

I hope, this
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project
is going to the
next
phase that we
really
need advanced analytics due to this my experience which
really
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helps
to
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move
our
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project
into
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good
initiation. I hope, you will
also
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very
happy with my new
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skill
experience.

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I
am looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

John
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IELTS letter Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: Ask for some time off to complete a qualification. Suggest what you will do later at work if you have to time off. Say how the qualification helps your job or company. v. 4

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  American English
6 paragraphs
152 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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