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You are staying at your friend’s house who is traveling to another country. A recent storm damaged the house. Write a letter to your friend and say– What happened and when– What was damaged in the house– What needs to be done about it. v.1

You are staying at your friend’s house who is traveling to another country. A recent storm damaged the house. Write a letter to your friend and say– What happened and when– What was damaged in the house– What needs to be done about it. v. 1
Dear John, How are you doing? I hope that your trip is fine and you are well. I didn' t want to disturb you, but a tragic catastrophe happened and resulted in some dire consequences. Unfortunately, while I was cooking yesterday evening, I heard a noisy sound that moves towards me gradually. After a few minutes, a powerful storm coming from the north had hit your house causing damage to several parts in it. Basically, the garden is completely destroyed because it doesn' t have any kinds of coverage that could mitigate storm power. Furthermore, not only are most of the roof tiles smashed, but also all the windows' glass is broken. Since the roof has got many gaps, new tiles should be installed as soon as possible in order to block these empty spaces, because if the house remained roofless, you will be directly exposed to rainwater. In addition, we have to contact a carpenter to replace the demolished glass in an effort to prevent flies and animals from sneaking in. Have a nice trip and see you soon. Warm wishes, Mark Ryan
Dear John,

How are you doing? I hope that your trip is fine and you are well. I
didn&
#039; t want to disturb you,
but
a tragic catastrophe happened and resulted in
some
dire consequences.

Unfortunately, while I was cooking yesterday evening, I heard a noisy sound that
moves
towards me
gradually
. After a few minutes, a powerful storm coming from the north had hit your
house
causing damage to several parts in it.

Basically
, the garden is completely
destroyed
because
it
doesn&
#039; t have any kinds of coverage that could mitigate storm power.
Furthermore
, not
only
are most of the roof tiles smashed,
but
also
all the
windows&
#039; glass
is broken
.

Since the roof has
got
many
gaps, new tiles should
be installed
as
soon
as possible in order to block these empty spaces,
because
if the
house
remained roofless, you will be
directly
exposed to rainwater.
In addition
, we
have to
contact a carpenter to replace the demolished glass in an effort to
prevent
flies and animals from sneaking in.

Have a nice trip and
see
you
soon
.

Warm wishes,

Mark Ryan
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
I am always sorry when any language is lost, because languages are the pedigrees of nations.
Samuel Johnson

IELTS letter You are staying at your friend’s house who is traveling to another country. A recent storm damaged the house. Write a letter to your friend and say– What happened and when– What was damaged in the house– What needs to be done about it. v. 1

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
183 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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