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A few days ago, you went shopping at a local grocery store. When you got home and looked at your bill, you found that you had been charged for items you did not purchase. Write a letter to the store manager. In your letter, •explain what happened•expres v.2

A few days ago, you went shopping at a local grocery store. When you got home and looked at your bill, you found that you had been charged for items you did not purchase. Write a letter to the store manager. In your letter, •explain what happened•expres v. 2
Dear Sir/ Madam, I am a regular customer of your store and I am writing this letter to raise a complaint regarding the error on my bill. I visited your Jmart, Park Plaza, on Jan 13th, around 11’o clock in the morning; purchased some eggs and groceries. As a habit, once I was back home, I cross-checked the bill and found that I have been incorrectly charged $7. 30 for pet food, which I did not buy as I don’t have a pet. The total bill value was $40. 20 and was the payment was done in cash. The cashier’s name as mentioned on the bill is Mr. Alex and invoice number is MTC-098. I am disappointed by the irresponsible behavior of your staff, moreover, I believe the issue would have been overlooked in case I would have not been cautious of checking the bill. I am unhappy about the situation. I would like to have a refund of $7. 30, the falsely charged amount the next time when I visit the store, additionally, I suggest better training for staff at the billing counters to avoid such mistakes in the future. Hope the matter will be addressed and resolved in time. Looking forward for your response. Your’s Faithfully, James Ray
Dear Sir/ Madam,

I am a regular customer of your
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store and
I am writing this letter to raise a complaint regarding the error on my bill.

I visited your
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Jmart
, Park Plaza, on Jan 13th, around 11’o clock in the morning;
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
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some
eggs and groceries. As a habit, once I was back home, I cross-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
checked
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bill
and found that I have been
incorrectly
charged $7. 30 for pet food, which I did not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
as I don’t have a pet. The total
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bill
value was $40. 20 and was the payment
was done
in cash. The cashier’s name as mentioned on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bill
is Mr. Alex and invoice number is MTC-098.

I
am disappointed
by the irresponsible behavior of your staff,
moreover
, I believe the issue would have
been overlooked
in case I would have not been cautious of checking the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bill
. I am unhappy about the situation.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would like to have a refund of $7. 30, the
falsely
charged amount the
next
time when I visit the store,
additionally
, I suggest better training for staff at the billing counters to avoid such mistakes in the future.

Hope the matter will
be addressed
and resolved in time. Looking forward for your response.

Did you mean "Your" or "Yours"?
Your’s
Faithfully
,

James Ray
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter A few days ago, you went shopping at a local grocery store. When you got home and looked at your bill, you found that you had been charged for items you did not purchase. Write a letter to the store manager. In your letter, •explain what happened•expres v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
209 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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