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Writing task 1 (a letter)You have borrowed something from your friend for a party and unfortunately it was damaged. Write a letter to your friend to apologise and say– What and when did you borrow? – What happened to it? Why? – What do you suggest to v.2

Writing task 1 (a letter)You have borrowed something from your friend for a party and unfortunately it was damaged. Write a letter to your friend to apologise and say– What and when did you borrow? – What happened to it? Why? – What do you suggest to v. 2
Hello Priya, Greetings for the day. ! ! I know it' s not been long we have met when I have borrowed your White Party Gown. I am writing this letter to asking for apologies from you as dress was damaged in party. As you know we have kept Black and White theme for my parents wedding anniversary party and last minute I didn' t found any good gown so I have borrowed White Party Gown from you. Actually, during party I was collide with one waiter who was serving drink and all drink was fallen on my dress. I was immediately ran towards washroom to clean the dress but the stain remain same, even I had tried dry cleaning but not able to remove the stain from your dress. I know it' s your favourite dress and sorry I have damaged it by mistake. But as a small gesture of sorry I have bought a new dress for you and I am sending the same via courier with this letter. I hope you like new dress and accept my apology. Kind Regards, Divya
Hello Priya,

Greetings for the day. ! !

I know
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#039; s not been long we have met when I have borrowed your White
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Party
Gown. I am writing this letter to asking for apologies from you as
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dress
was damaged
in party.

As you know we have
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kept
Black and White theme for my parents wedding anniversary
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party
and last minute I
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didn&
#039; t found any
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good
gown
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so
I have borrowed White
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Party
Gown from you. Actually, during
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party
I was
Consider using a past participle here: "collided".
collide
with one waiter who was serving drink and all drink
was fallen
on my
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dress
. I was immediately ran towards washroom to clean the
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dress
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but
the stain remain same, even I had tried dry cleaning
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but
not able to remove the stain from your
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dress
. I know
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it&
#039; s your
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favourite
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dress
and sorry I have damaged it by mistake.
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But
as a
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small
gesture of sorry I have
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bought
a new
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dress
for
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you and
I am sending the same via courier with this letter.

I hope you like new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dress
and accept my apology.

Kind Regards,

Divya
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS letter Writing task 1 (a letter)You have borrowed something from your friend for a party and unfortunately it was damaged. Write a letter to your friend to apologise and say– What and when did you borrow? – What happened to it? Why? – What do you suggest to v. 2

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  American English
7 paragraphs
183 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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