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You are relocating to a new city. write a letter to an agent to arrange a house for you and your family. When and why are you relocating. what kind of house do you want? v.2

You are relocating to a new city. write a letter to an agent to arrange a house for you and your family. When and why are you relocating. what kind of house do you want? v. 2
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IELTS letter You are relocating to a new city. write a letter to an agent to arrange a house for you and your family. When and why are you relocating. what kind of house do you want? v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
544 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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