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Your friend would like to visit your hometown Write a letter to him and say What is the best time of the year to visit your hometown Suggest some places to visit in your hometown Invite your friend to meet your family v.2

Your friend would like to visit your hometown Write a letter to him and say What is the best time of the year to visit your hometown Suggest some places to visit in your hometown Invite your friend to meet your family v. 2
Dear John I hope this letter will id you in radiant and best of spirit. Yesterday I received you letter and come to know about your desire of visiting my hometown. It is such a good opportunity to meet again and spend time with each other. As you asked about the period in which you can enjoy your trip, in your letter, then I think October will be perfect for coming here, because it is the month of indian festivals. I am living in Himachal Pardesh and Kullu my hometown is well famous for its Dussera. It is a symbol of “Truth wins over lie”. There are some other places like Manali where we will go together and enjoy the natural sceneries and weather also. It is a tourist place, which contribute 75% of the tourism revenue to the state. There are so many activities like river rafting and mountain trekking which will be enjoyed together, because we both are adventures by nature. Moreover, on the occasion of Diwali festival of lights, my all family members will come back home from their jobs to enjoy this festival together. It will be a good chance to meet with all of then at my home apart from this on this day my mother cooked so many delicious food which we will enjoy. I hope you will plan in this particular time to enjoy a lot. Kindly book your tickets and inform me in advance so that i can arrange all the activities in advance before your arrival. Give regards to your younger siblings and greeting to your parents Yours truly Heema
Dear John

I hope this letter will id you in radiant and best of spirit. Yesterday I received you letter and
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come
to know about your desire of visiting my hometown. It is such a
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good
opportunity to
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meet
again and spend time with each other.

As you asked about the period in which you can
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enjoy
your trip, in your letter, then I
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think
October will be perfect for coming here,
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because
it is the month of
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indian
festivals. I am living in Himachal
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Pardesh
and
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Kullu
my hometown is well
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famous
for its
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Dussera
. It is a symbol of “Truth wins over lie”.

There are
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some
other places like
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Manali
where we will go together and
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enjoy
the natural sceneries and weather
also
. It is a tourist place, which contribute 75% of the tourism revenue to the state. There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
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many
activities like river rafting and mountain trekking which will
be enjoyed
together,
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because
we both are adventures by nature.

Moreover
, on the occasion of Diwali festival of lights, my all family members will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
back home from their jobs to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
enjoy
this festival together. It will be a
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good
chance to
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meet
with
Consider using "all then" or "all of the then".
all of then
at my home apart from this on this day my mother cooked
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so
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many
delicious food which we will enjoy.

I hope you will plan in this particular time to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
enjoy
a lot. Kindly book your tickets and inform me in advance
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so
that
Did you mean "I"?
i
can arrange all the activities in advance
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before
your arrival. Give regards to your younger siblings and greeting to your
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
parents


Yours
truly


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Heema
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS letter Your friend would like to visit your hometown Write a letter to him and say What is the best time of the year to visit your hometown Suggest some places to visit in your hometown Invite your friend to meet your family v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
268 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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