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My LetterYou are relocating to a new city. write a letter to an agent to arrange a house for you and your family. When and why are you relocating. what kind of house do you want? v.2

My LetterYou are relocating to a new city. write a letter to an agent to arrange a house for you and your family. When and why are you relocating. what kind of house do you want? v. 2
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing with regard to renting a house / apartment in toronto, canada. me and my family is moving to canada to live there. Let me explain it further, I have booked seats for us on 23rd of October of PIA from Islamabad airport to toronto airport. we are going to land there at 3pm. To find new prospect of employment and better education of my children, i decided to get immigration of canada. which i have been awarded after fulfilling all basis requirements. we are family of six person, me, my wife and four kinds. we need a spacious house as rent would not be a problem for me. As per requirement, it should have garage for 2 cars, three bedrooms and spacious kitchen. I am looking forward to your response, if you need any further information feel free to contact me on my mobile (0092-222-22222) Yours faithfully, SAIRA
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing with regard to renting a
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house
/ apartment in
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toronto
,
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canada
.
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me
and my family is moving to
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canada
to
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live
there.

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Let
me
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explain
it
further
, I have booked seats for us on 23rd of October of
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PIA
from Islamabad airport to
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toronto
airport.
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we
are going to land there at 3pm. To find new prospect of employment and better education of my children,
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
decided to
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get
immigration of
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canada
.
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which
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
have
been awarded
after fulfilling all basis requirements.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
we
are family of six
Possible agreement error. The noun 'person' seems to be countable, so consider using: "people", "persons".
person
, me, my wife and four kinds.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
we
need a spacious
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
as rent would not be a problem for me. As per requirement, it should have garage for 2 cars, three bedrooms and spacious kitchen.

I am looking forward to your response, if you need any
further
information feel free to contact me on my mobile (0092-222-22222)

Yours
faithfully
,

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SAIRA
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Mistakes
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IELTS letter My LetterYou are relocating to a new city. write a letter to an agent to arrange a house for you and your family. When and why are you relocating. what kind of house do you want? v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
152 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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