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you are planning to stay in a hotel in an English speaking country. You are writing to the hotel manager to find out some additional information. In your letter ask the following questions: • What the daily rate v.2

you are planning to stay in a hotel in an English speaking country. You are writing to the hotel manager to find out some additional information. In your letter ask the following questions: • What the daily rate v. 2
Dear Manager, I am writing to ask for some information about your hotel where I am intending to stay from 23rd April 2017 and I hope that I would get answers to most of my questions which I would raise in the below paragraphs. First of all, I would like to know the daily standard rates for one night stay at your hotel. Secondly, I would be interested to know more details about the facilities at your hotel like availability of rooms for business meetings and an auditorium for speaking conferences which will be organized by my company. In addition to this, it would be great if an arrangement can be made for the recreational facilities like tea and snacks. Finally, I would appreciate if you can provide me some more information on the excursions offered by the hotel. In particular, I would want to know that do you guys offer any road-trips to Picasso museum and Alfred national park which is hardly 200 miles from your hotel. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully Faizal
Dear Manager,

I am writing to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ask for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
information about your hotel where I am intending to stay from 23rd April 2017 and I hope that I would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
answers to most of my questions which I would raise in the below paragraphs.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, I would like to know the daily standard rates for one night stay at your hotel.

Secondly
, I would
be interested
to know more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
about the facilities at your hotel like availability of rooms for business meetings and an auditorium for speaking conferences which will
be organized
by my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.
In addition
to this, it would be great if an arrangement can
be made
for the recreational facilities like tea and snacks.

Finally
, I would appreciate if you can provide me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
more information on the excursions offered by the hotel.
In particular
, I would want to know that do you guys offer any road-trips to Picasso museum and Alfred national park which is hardly
Writing for an international audience? Consider adding the metric equivalent.
200 miles
from your hotel.

I look forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
faithfully


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Faizal
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter you are planning to stay in a hotel in an English speaking country. You are writing to the hotel manager to find out some additional information. In your letter ask the following questions: • What the daily rate v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
178 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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