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You stayed at a hotel recently and forgot your clothes there. Write a letter to the hotel manager and say– When and where did you stay? – Describe your clothes. – What would you like the manager to do about it? v.2

You stayed at a hotel recently and forgot your clothes there. Write a letter to the hotel manager and say– When and where did you stay? – Describe your clothes. – What would you like the manager to do about it? v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Clara Johnson, I stayed at your hotel last week. I am writing to require your assistance regarding the following issue. On December 1st I arrived to Chicago for business purposes and checked in Hilton hotel. I was given the room number 14 which is located on the second floor. My booking was for 7 days, however I had to leave abruptly after 3 days because of an emergency situation at my work. Due to the haste, I packed my bag carelessly and forgot some clothes in the room’s wardrobe. My grey velvet jacket and a matching skirt, as well as black leather shoes were left there. Could you please send these items by FedEx to my home address: 1234 New York, 15 Bolton street? The delivery costs can be withdrawn from my credit card as an extra hotel service. It’s the same card that I used to pay for my stay. I would appreciate your help very much. If you need further details you can contact me by phone +123456958. I’m looking forward hearing from you, Yours sincerely, Clara Johnson.
Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is Clara Johnson, I stayed at your hotel last week. I am writing to require your assistance regarding the following issue.

On December 1st I arrived to Chicago for business purposes and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
checked
in Hilton hotel. I was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
the room number 14 which
is located
on the second floor.

My booking was for 7 days,
however
I had to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
abruptly
after 3 days
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of an emergency situation at my work. Due to the haste, I packed my bag
carelessly
and forgot
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
clothes in the room’s wardrobe. My
Possible spelling mistake. 'grey' is British English.
grey
velvet jacket and a matching skirt,
as well
as black leather shoes were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
there.

Could you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
these items by FedEx to my home address: 1234 New York, 15 Bolton street? The delivery costs can be withdrawn from my credit card as an extra hotel service. It’s the same card that I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to pay for my stay.

I would appreciate your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
much.
“If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
you need
further
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
you can contact me by phone +123456958.

I’m looking forward hearing from you,

Yours
sincerely
,

Clara Johnson.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter You stayed at a hotel recently and forgot your clothes there. Write a letter to the hotel manager and say– When and where did you stay? – Describe your clothes. – What would you like the manager to do about it? v. 2

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
187 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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