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You have recently visited a city on vacation and stayed in a hotel. Write a letter to the manager about your stay. In your letter: • Give details of your stay• What were the high & low points of the hotel• What are your suggestions; recommend v.2

You have recently visited a city on vacation and stayed in a hotel. Write a letter to the manager about your stay. In your letter: • Give details of your stay• What were the high & low points of the hotel• What are your suggestions; recommend v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I have recently stayed in your hotel Park Inn Bangalore, for about a week ago. The outside temperature was quite high during and unfortunately, when I am entered in the hotel room air conditioner was not fully operational. I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction and given proposition. Due to this and would like you to take steps so that it does not happen again. I was checked into the hotel at afternoon on 24th July and straightaway went to bed. However, after turning the air conditioner on, I realized that the room was not getting cooler and the room temperature was exceptional high, but the outside view was astonish which was give me some peace and pleasure. I called the hotel staff to solve the problem but they could not do anything and no other room was available at that time. Hence, I decided to stay in this room and open the window so natural air to cool my room. I had to sleep in skimpy clothes, which I don' t and prefer, to over the heat. Noise from the road came through in the open window and my sleep was disrupted again and again. I think it would be a good idea to install the central heating and cooling system and be ready for such arousal issues. A room system for each room along with the central heating and cooling system will be check before the guest come into the room. . Perhaps you would consider giving me a discount if I stay at your hotel next time. Regards, Gaurav Sharma.
Dear Sir or Madam,

I have recently stayed in your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hotel
Park Inn Bangalore, for about a week ago. The outside temperature was quite high during and unfortunately, when I
am entered
in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hotel
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
air conditioner was not
fully
operational. I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
proposition. Due to this and would like you to take steps
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that it does not happen again.

I was
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checked
into the
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hotel
at afternoon on 24th July and straightaway went to bed.
However
, after turning the air conditioner on, I realized that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
was not getting cooler and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
temperature was exceptional high,
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but
the outside view was
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astonish
which was give me
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some
peace and pleasure.

I called the
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hotel
staff to solve the problem
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
they could not do anything and no other
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room
was available at that time.
Hence
, I decided to stay in this
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room
and open the window
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
natural air to cool my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
. I had to sleep in skimpy clothes, which I
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don&
#039; t and prefer, to over the heat. Noise from the road came through in the open window and my sleep
was disrupted
again and again.

I
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think
it would be a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
to install the central heating and cooling system and be ready for such arousal issues. A
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
system for each
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room
along with the central heating and cooling system will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
the guest
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
into the
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room
.
Don't put a space before the full stop
.
Perhaps you would consider giving me a discount if I stay at your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hotel
next
time.

Regards,

Gaurav Sharma.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter You have recently visited a city on vacation and stayed in a hotel. Write a letter to the manager about your stay. In your letter: • Give details of your stay• What were the high & low points of the hotel• What are your suggestions; recommend v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
269 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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