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When you studied abroad, you found a new friend that is now asking for your help to find a job in your country that will suits his qualification. State the job that is available. Reason why he will be choosen by the owner. Explain how will he apply for the p v.2

When you studied abroad, you found a new friend that is now asking for your help to find a job in your country that will suits his qualification. State the job that is available. Reason why he will be choosen by the owner. Explain how will he apply for the p v. 2
Dear Jon, Hi! How are you? I received your letter yesterday and I am more than willing to refer you to one of the best restaurants in our place. In fact, your timing is perfect because last week, one of my colleagues is looking for a chef for their restaurant that can cook a plethora of Asian cuisine. I am 100% sure that you will love this job. Your passion in cooking is remarkable. The position will suit your experience and of course, I am a living witness that you are a hard-working, nice and talented person. In addition, the baking skills that you have will be an extra point so that the owner will choose you. To speed up the process, just send your résumé in this email address cookinghiring101@gmail. com. The owner will contact you through Skype. Just prepare to send your important documents and hopefully, after a month or two, your flight details will be available for you to print. See you soon! All the best, Anna Ala
Dear Jon,

Hi! How are you? I received your letter
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
yesterday and
I am more than willing to refer you to one of the best restaurants in our place. In fact, your timing is perfect
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because
last week, one of my colleagues is looking for a chef for their restaurant that can cook a plethora of Asian cuisine.

I am 100% sure that you will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
this job. Your passion in cooking is remarkable. The position will suit your experience and
of course
, I am a living witness that you are a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
-working, nice and talented person.
In addition
, the baking
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
that you have will be an extra point
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so
that the owner will choose you.

To
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speed up
the process,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
your résumé in this email address cookinghiring101@gmail.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
com
. The owner will contact you through Skype.
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Just
prepare to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
your
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important
documents and
hopefully
, after a month or two, your flight
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
will be available for you to print.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
See
you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
!

All the best,

Anna Ala
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter When you studied abroad, you found a new friend that is now asking for your help to find a job in your country that will suits his qualification. State the job that is available. Reason why he will be choosen by the owner. Explain how will he apply for the p v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
170 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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