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Write letter to along time colleague that you will not be able to attend his/her good bye party. -Why you will not be able to attend-How you enjoyed working with her/him-How you will keep contact with him/her v.2

Write letter to along time colleague that you will not be able to attend his/her good bye party. -Why you will not be able to attend-How you enjoyed working with her/him-How you will keep contact with him/her v. 2
Dear Puja, I hope you are doing well. I was shocked to know that you are leaving us. Last week Brian told me that, you found a new job and next week is your last week at work. I am already worried that you are leaving us, and I already start missing you just by thinking that you are going away. I am feeling really bad to tell you that, I will not be able to attend your goodbye party next week. I have an important appointment with my Dentist next week so, I could not make it. Anyways I will see you after also since, we live nearby. It was always fun and enjoyable working with you. We always worked in a team and you are always helpful whenever I face any problem at work. I will each and every moment we shared together and our coffee talks. Though, you are leaving the work, but I am happy to know that you found a better job which suits your degree and the job which you were dreaming for from long time. I will contact you through mobile and social media. I wish you all the best for your bright future. Yours truly, Preeti
Dear
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Puja
,

I hope you are doing well. I
was shocked
to know that you are leaving us. Last
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week
Brian
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told
me that, you found a new job and
next
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
week
is your last
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
week
at work. I am already worried that you are leaving us, and I already
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
missing you
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just
by thinking that you are going away.

I am feeling
really
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
to
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tell
you that, I will not be able to attend your goodbye party
next
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
week
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have an
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important
appointment with my Dentist
next
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
week
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
, I could not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it. Anyways I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
you after
also
since, we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
nearby.

It was always fun and enjoyable working with you. We always worked in a team and you are always helpful whenever I face any problem at work. I will each and every moment we shared together and our coffee talks.

Though, you are leaving the work,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I am happy to know that you found a better job which suits your degree and the job which you were dreaming for from long time. I will contact you through mobile and social media. I wish you all the best for your bright future.

Yours
truly
,

Preeti
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS letter Write letter to along time colleague that you will not be able to attend his/her good bye party. -Why you will not be able to attend-How you enjoyed working with her/him-How you will keep contact with him/her v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
203 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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