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You are organising a trip to the Snowy Mountains in New South Wales for a group of students from Perth in Western Australia. v.4

You are organising a trip to the Snowy Mountains in New South Wales for a group of students from Perth in Western Australia. v. 4
Dear Sir or Madam, I am a student at the St Mary's College in Perth, Western Australia, and I am planning to go on a trip to the Snowy Mountains in New South Wales with a few other classmates of mine. We would like to stay in your hostel and would appreciate your help regarding this. We are planning to stay at your hostel from 4th June to 11th June 2019. We will be ten students in total and we need accommodation facilities for all. We expect five rooms, each with attached bathroom and room heater. Moreover, we would like to have cooking facilities as a few of us would like to cook for themselves. Our team would primarily explore the Snowy Mountains area and do skiing. However, we would be in a few other places nearby to travel the whole area. Any recommendation would be highly appreciated. It would be great if you could inform the availability of the rooms between 4th and 11th January. I would also request the cost for the rooms and details of the included facilities. I hope to receive the information soon. Yours faithfully, Ashesha Weerasinghe
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a student at the St Mary's College in Perth, Western Australia, and I am planning to go on a trip to the Snowy Mountains in New South Wales with a few other classmates of mine. We would like to stay in your hostel and would appreciate your
help
regarding this.

We are planning to stay at your hostel from 4th June to 11th June 2019.
We
will be ten students in
total and
we need accommodation facilities for all.
We
expect
five
rooms
, each with attached bathroom and
room
heater.
Moreover
, we would like to have cooking facilities as a few of us would like to cook for themselves.

Our team would
primarily
explore the Snowy Mountains area and
do skiing
.
However
, we would be in a few other places nearby to travel the whole area. Any recommendation would be
highly
appreciated.

It would be great if you could inform the availability of the
rooms
between 4th and 11th January. I would
also
request the cost for the
rooms
and
details
of the included facilities.

I hope to receive the information
soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Ashesha
Weerasinghe
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS letter You are organising a trip to the Snowy Mountains in New South Wales for a group of students from Perth in Western Australia. v. 4

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
191 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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